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The Bottle



                  There's a bottle in the water,
                      What's it doing there?
                  I'll bet the fishes think
                      Its really quite unfair.
                  Did someone from a passing boat
                      Chuck it in the air?
                  Or did it use a river
                      To catch itself a ride?
                  Maybe its my bottle
                      But if that is true,
                  Its travelled for a long long way
                      And seen some lovely views.
                  I live near a river,
                      I know there 's bottles there,
                  So I wonder if floodwaters
                      Take bottles free of fare.
                  I can see it floating past
                      Farms and towns along the way
                  Taking in the scenery
                      We dream of every day.
                  It must have taken weeks
                      To get from here to there;
                  I wonder its not broken
                      Stuck in the mud somewhere.
                  But I saw it in a photo
                      So I'm really sure its there,
                  Somewhere in the ocean
                      Where the fish think its unfair.




Have you ever found a bottle in the ocean?

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  • condor gold member
    October 17, 2008

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    excellent poem, Bob. I like the question in this write. Those poor fish should be repected. They don't throw stuff on our land, do they? Just wondering though why one verse in the whole poem didn't have a rhyme. (did someone from a passing boat, chuck it in the air, or did it use a river, to catch itself a ride) Perhaps this was a purposeful write. Maybe i just read it wrong. Regardless i loved it to bits.


    • rbruce gold member
      October 17, 2008
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      The lack of a rhyme in that line is simply an error by the writer. I had not even noticed it. Thanks for letting me know. I shall have to edit it to make a correction. I try to keep the patterns I use constant throughout the poem. Manys thanks for your encouraging remarks.

  • kiwigirljacks
    February 28, 2008

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    That's so cute! And lovely too... I could just see the bottle floating past wonderful sights... things we can only dream of seeing sometimes! Yes, I've found a bottle in the ocean... I hope there would be a letter in it, but sadly no!
    lol


    • rbruce gold member
      February 28, 2008
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      Thank you my Kiwi friend, you have made my day. I'm so glad that I'm not the only one that dreams.