i stand behind trees to escape the whipping wind, but when you're my tree i wait to be blown into the depths of your sweet-smelling coat. my pockets are canyon-deep with holes like stars, losing everything along the way. wait for the asphalt ocean to turn into cold, iron waves and smile because your eyes are warm. the colour of brandy that warms your mouth and heart, and doesn't stop. when the moon breathes the north onto us, you breath life into me. making its way over my lips and through my hair. will our house fall down on us? lay our lives aside on our last night and let it crumble on our faces. swim through the galaxies we never saw before while we search for hands in the sea of bedsheets. will you write me from where you're going? can we both go home? i promise you'll love me when we can't find the way.
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Deep...
You poured your soul into this...
Very spirtual...
Lo-Amo
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i'm actually very non-spiritual and soulLESS at the moment but if you'd like some poetry with soul poured into it, i have some available to read!
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Uh... pretty nice one. I can feel the passion there, and the metaphoric usage is well developed. I'd just recommend to put this into more lines, but maybe it was your idea to leave it this way.
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thanks for the advice but more importantly i have some advice for you, "uh..." sounds really rude in a comment so unless you want to offend people, you should probably leave that out. otherwise, i'd like to know why you thought i should put in more lines.
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GREAT
I loved it
It made me want to fuck all the haters out there
I hate it when ppl just dont get where we are coming from.
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thanks man
hahahahah
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this is beautiful.
art & love & nature, a combination so perfect.
This felt very balanced to me, all colors and elements all pouring into a pot of heartache and pure love.
This was heartfelt, and a lot of the lines were sooo well crafted.
"when the moon breathes the north onto us, you breath life into me"
That was probably my favorite line. it was ice cream and butterfly kisses and a gorgeous blizzard.
So crisp and delish.
This was personal, thoughtful and felt like a journey around the world with love.
xoxo♥
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thankyou, thankyou thankyou.
i'm so glad that you put thought into your comment to me, i really appreciate it when people do so.
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WOW!
We turn the corner of a narrow lane and proceed into the three dimensional boulevard of infinity lined only with fond wistful acknowledgements of a love boundless in its depth and scope yet brisk in its direction and conduct as it lays so much convention above, beneath and beyond its initial reach. Unusual yet fulfilling.
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thankyou very much
it's well appreciated
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