taking two lips to softly purse
in the briefest togetherness
she sounds the penultimate letter of the alphabet,
why, she says, at the core of analogy,
was what happened when possibility
and probability got engaged
to circumstance,
perchance thought met and married action
making random, complex simplicity
into some sort of matter
via either existence or existentialism,
past, present and future participles
perambulate the paradigm of perimeters
fragmenting the finite and the infinite
Author notes
Contest entry to answer the question "why?"
NB My personal theory in relation to "why" is that possibility meets probability and becomes particles of matter.
Emotional or constructive critique welcome
A contest entry
- Answer The Question by Pollycheck.
450 points, ended March 13, 2008, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
your thoughts please dear poets and singers of songs...
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Very good theory. You did a good job with creativity and use of words. I wish you the best in the contest. Be blessed...Trina.
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oh I do like this! Thoughtful and provocative. It would take a lot of reading to understand it thoroughly.
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Yvette, I read this several time...very deep thoughts.
Excellent write.
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The only one I know who knows why is God and last time I was listening, He wasn't telling. I will dance with yours until the rain stops running through the down spout and flooding my basement.
Love, Tom B
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good luck in the conest yes you have answered WHY i think you have rather eloquently stated this in your poem:" NB My personal theory in relation to "why" is that possibility meets probability and becomes particles of matter." good titles intriguing opening stanza good alliteration/strong ending thanks for sharing regards zaj
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Thank you for entering my why contest. This is a very hard poem to read. It runs together and seems to be just a very long sentence. I realize that punctuation is up to the poet, but I think that punctuation would make this much easier to read. I also found some typos or misspellings:
particples
perameters
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This is one smart, tight, piece of writing. I was thinking along the lines of time and space this morning too, must be somethin in the water.
Loved:
"and probability got engaged
to circumstance, perchance
thought met and married action"
lol.
Excellent.
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This is so clever! It seems almost scientific, but also deeply spiritual, in a way.
"what happened when possibility
and probability got engaged
to circumstance"
Very thought provoking indeed. I love
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but but but the last letter doesn't take two lips to sound....can be said without lips... when they're frozen to the ice box, z can still be said..Y ?
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Wonderfully done, sister. Read this twice. Enjoyed the flow but love the sound more. The alliteration. The flow. Write on. One.
Dez
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Excellent
It's refreshing to see intelligent and literate poetry on this site, so hats off to you for dealing so capably with such a complex theme. Intellectually, the poem is satisfying, and poetically, the alliteration and flow works very well.
Bill
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alliteration deep - complex simplicity, a great phrase that to sum up this madness we all quicksand through. i liked the sounding of the last letter of the alphabet then right after that you say why (y) lol that brought a smile to this old boat race. a good poem.
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A bit of a twister to read, but once I overcame that it all fell into place very well.
I think you took a difficult prompt and gave it an interesting twist.
The Alliteration towards the end gave it a flowing finsh and what an ending ... certainly one that makes the intellectual part of me pause for deeper thought.
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this is very ID like, the process of calm and light.. the internal integrity kept intact and honest
what of the time and present thought, why we ponder on the past is always bemusing to us all, yet we still do it..
lovely piece of writing Yvette, thought provoking indeed
no more shudders in the night, thank goodness
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you can traverse the very basics of humanity in such clever, unhinged form, which only begs the question of WHY, can you create such beauty in a world that doesn't recognize it enough. The very bottom of our soul is carpeted with those three letters, it's why we stand, walk, run, and dream, the answer to it's own question, we ask why because we wish to know why, why do we wish to know?? you could have put that word down alone and evicted as much of a ramble as this, instead you chose to delve deeper. As always i will leave this with an incredible astonishment and acknowledgement of your wisdom, bravo
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You go girl. This is intellectually explosive. I like the flow too. It fits the vocabulary being used.
Nicely done.
John
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Jeez
That is an amazing poem I loved the vocabulary, and I think it was very well put together. I'm incredibly impressed; it didn't seem to have any sort of rhyme or meter scheme, but it seemed to have something that I just can't name. I really enjoyed it. I think that it’s nice how you incorporating a very touching sort of love thing at the beginning, and it was nice how you seemed to question the essence of love, but without the morbidity and intense anger that a lot of the poems on this site do. It was also nice that it isn’t mushy, but it still manages to strike a chord. I can’t wait to read more of what you’ve written.
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