She looked at me one day
her face pale in fragile beauty
her eyes like the stars
twinkling just so;
warmth of her shallow scent
lingering upon her curves
[and even more upon my nose]
her lips parted
and emitted the answer
I have been waiting to hear
her soft seductive voice
rough against her weather torn lips
formed the words;
“because... I love you.”
Author notes
Prompt:
Why?
In a list
A contest entry
- Answer The Question by Pollycheck.
450 points, ended March 13, 2008, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Be honest here.
Comments
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oh this is beautiful. i love the flow and the simpleness of it.
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I really liked it.
I don't do contests myself, it's like writing on command, and I don't do that very well. I loved your take on it. For a young writer, you have a very mature way with words. This piece paints a beautiful picture in words. Very nicely done. The only thing that I would have done is title it Because, that's because that is the only answer to why. Great write.
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Thank you for entering my contest. I really like your take on the prompt. You have said volumes in just a ferw lines. Very nice.
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I really enjoyed this poem. Nice imagery. And great response to the prompt. Good luck in the contest!!
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