Her body spread open
tied tight to the bedposts.
Karada encased,
with that wickedly placed knot
rubbing and grinding away.
Voices murmur from
two rooms away, removed from
her, her vision gone.
Fragrant juices seep forth from
panties stuffed in her mouth.
Floating away in
endorphin laced spaces,
her breathing slows
to a crawl and a shudder,
anticipating touch soon.
She trembles and moans
as not one, but two mouths
attack those raging nibs.
Four hands tease exposed
skin stretched to the limit.
A symphony of lust
played in sensual tones.
Both her lovers taunt
not only with voice, words,
but licks, nibbles, bites.
A hand slaps red breasts
as the gag is removed.
Fragrant, wet folds are
lowered onto her waiting face.
Her tongue reaches out to taste.
The other tongue flicks
the little pleasure nub between
her legs, desire floods
the face nestled in those folds.
Juice coats his face, his lips.
Two kisses, lips meet,
hips sweetly rise and fall,
aching for the prize,
that sweet moment of release,
when three explode as one.
As her tongue explores
the warmth of her lover’s core,
he pushes himself,
a throbbing column of heat
deep inside her, claiming her.
Both women scream as
orgasm claims their wanton walls.
Ripples of lust milk him
as he spends each drop of love.
Tangled together, they sleep.
Author notes
This is an entry to the Erotic Challenge of Master Ktulu.
http://allpoetry.com/column/show/2340783
My challenge was to write about a threesome. I decided to do it in a semi-structured way. Each stanza was a short form of poetry with syllable counts of 5-7-5-7-7 at most.
A karada is a rope tie that encases the body and is really quite beautiful. Some people call it a rope dress as well. I had to incorporate some elements of BDSM ... forgives me *grins*.
Hope you enjoy it.
Please tell me what you think
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Bravo
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laughs.. ok now i need to go stand in the rain! Boy I should know better than to read your poetry at work!
This is very special and really left me wanting...
Naids
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You're such a great poet! I absolutely love reading your work!!
I hope you did well in the challenge!
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ookay damn.....this indeed was one helluva piece. I loved it. Yet now I had to change my last comment on the last entry lol now this is perfection. This makes number three I marked 100....
well done and best of luck to you in this challenge.
Passions
100 score for this here entry
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spelling and grammar = 20
presentation = 20
originality = 20
'grab me' effect = 20
overall = 20
Wonderful job B!!!!! You have DEFINITELY gone the extra mile with this one!
CONGRATS on the perfect score!
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Terrific write fellow captain!
And a VERY enjoyable read...
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Thank you fellow captain. *Tips my hat to ya and your brilliant entry this round*. I enjoy your work as well.
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Amazing and so beautifully written.
Margaret
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Well thank you darlin. Glad you liked it.
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WOW
erm this is mind blowing darling!! such a beautifully written piece of work, (think i need a cool shower)the words paint the perfect picture, making my mouth water for that kind of expereince, think you may have just woken up my creativity which has been absent for such a long time! delicous honey! so well done xx
(only one thing is this page is sooo bright its actually quite hard on the eyes!) xxx cheryl
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Thank you. I am so glad it inspired you. There is always something good in erotica I think. The background is going back to blue after the judging is done.
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Very beautiful and passionate. The excitement seemed to build up in the poem with each stanza. Best of luck to you in the challenge.
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Thanks Arzab. So glad you enjoyed it and how it built up.
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lovely and expressive...enjoyed...PK
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Thank you so much. Glad you enjoyed.
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the background color is still a bit bright, lol that was the first thing that i noticed when the page opened. there's no missing this page
spelling and grammar=20
originality=20
presentation=20
how well you handled the challenge=20
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Thank you Shimmer. I am so glad you liked it. Yup, tis bright, I know ... I am definitely changing it after judging.
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Tanzanite....
I LOVED THIS...This is absolutely perfect..everything is perfect...all of it. The background is a bit bright but the write itself is just awesome..
spelling/grammar - 20
presentation - 19 (the background was just a bit rough for me)
originality - 20
how well you handled challenge - 20
overall - 20
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I changed the colour back to the original colour I think. Sorry it was reflexive to edit ... smiles.
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I changed the background colour. Thanks for your comments. See, I got it in just in time.
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