I sit here looking
Through my window at
That bright star just above
The north star
The one you and I
Call our "star"
And all that runs through
My mind is all the
Laughs,tears,smiles
You've brought to me
Remembering the times
I thought this would never happen
That you and I would never be one
Never once did I think
I'd fall for you like this
Never once did I think
I'd need you more
Then a tree needs air
More then a fish needs water
[To be finished later]
Please tell me what you think
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Wow, I like this one. Great write. When are you going to finish, i'd like to read the rest.
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Hmm great job let me know when you finish this
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i love this...its reall nice and cute. u write very well
please check out my new poem called: the silver spoon and the plastic knife. it would make my day. thanks
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you know when my hubby(BF at the time) was on his first deployment i would look at the moon and think you know he sees the same moon it may seem corny i know but its what i thought about and ok this is weird ill admit but i would whisper words and think you know that he could feel him in his heart lol ok im a loser
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Good job, Love is grand you just never know when its gonna take you but it does. Keep writing Ashlee this is a good start.
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"My Bright and Shining Star" might be a good title--
This is very well written & Versed--Easily read with good flow! I can't wait for you to finish it!
Well Done!
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Thank you for the comment!!
And the idea for the title
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