One day you will know
the things he did for you.
One day you will know
all that he went through.
One day you will know
how important you are.
One day you will know
you left him such a scar.
One day you will know
he loved you above all.
One day you will know
that you let him fall.
A hand outstretched,
but not to be caught.
And into an abyss
no matter how he fought.
One day you will know
that he could have been saved.
But one thing you'll never know....
Are the demons he staved.
Author notes
I dunno... just sort of... came out of me.
Please tell me what you think
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i really like this the words you use!!! very dark but yet very touching it shows that he really cared i really enjoyed reading this..very nice job very enjoyable nice thanks for writeing it
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"one day you will know... that you let him fall..."
i love this write. ^.^ what else is there to say?
this is one of my favorite writes on ap.... >.< it flows well, and i love the rhyme scheme. great job. 
hey... can i bookmark this... pretty please?
oh, and btw. ur page is wicked cool. ^.^ just thought i'd let u know.
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Of course you can bookmark it, and thank you for your comment.
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thanks! and... ur welcome (sorry. i have to reply here. my msging doesnt work -.-) anyway... ur very talented! >.< keep it up
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yo hey, ya got one up. I like it nick.
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wow. this is great. reminds me of some things.
One day you will know
that he could have been saved.
But one thing you'll never know....
Are the demons he staved.
love it -
Oh - awesome picture too x
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Wow, a great emotionally powerful piece you have written here...if it came out of you like this then I'm sure you must have or still are experienced something like this. I know it's not the point with this poem but I think the last line would fit slightly better if it was "Are the demons that he staved". Apart from that the flow was perfect and the rhyme was excellent. Good stuff, keep it up
Take care x
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One day she will see - definitely
And probably she already does.
What's important is to stand strong no matter what
It's great seeing another poem from you - keep writing and continue getting better
If anything, I'm here for you
-Chandni
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