Inhale one last breath,
hands locked in
around your throat,
can you not realize
that there is no release?
Until the time comes…
Un-pious temple of sin,
when you were
preaching your lie,
did you not know
that I could not die?
Until the time comes…
Look deep in my eyes,
can’t you see
that my skies
were not darkened
by your mere presence?
It had always been there…
Fake me more innocent pleas
whilst you’re praying
down on your knees,
I’m not your master,
but I’m just a spirit of vengeance.
It had always been there…
This thought has brought truth,
clarity cannot despise
that in this moment,
a freedom’s bell rings
chiming emotionless, your demise.
The time has come…
It is a gift unto my soul
to take your life,
when once pale skin
turns to pallid blue,
in rebirth, I am now cleansed
and I can begin it all again…
until the time comes.
Author notes
Inspired by the music and lyrics of the song "Elastic Inverted Visions" by Hypocrisy.
The music in the Hypocrisy song is very ominous and atmospheric, whilst the lyrics to me seem to be about a killer. This idea got stuck in my head, so I decided to write similarly, though from a different angle, as the killer isn't killing for pleasure, psychologically, he is killing out of not only what he feels is necessity, but also through a twisted psychological and spiritual ideal, in that if he kills those who are sinful, specifically, liars, it will cleanse his own soul, his own sin and free him.
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A contest entry
- Listen....Write.... by aslanlight.
1500 points, ended March 7, 2008, 3 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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excillent write, very dark, congrats on winning gold
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Brilliant!
Your words have the rhythm of the song and I can play them in my head along with the track. I think your words are very descriptive of the lyrics and sound. Yes impressed!
Peace Georgia
P.S Knew it was you even before I saw your mohawked head down below!
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Thank you most kindly. The rhythm I think happened unconciously by accident as I was writing it just after I had listened to it a few times. I was trying to keep the rhythm consistant from one stanza to the next, but didn't realise at all that it was also consistant with the song lol.
My style becoming very obvious, huh?
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Nice stuff full of serial killers, strangulation, asphyixiation and all that other beautiful stuff [yes, I am disturbed so sue me! Noticed yet?!?!]. Nicely done though. Good luck in the contest. x
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Thank you very much. It is a subject matter I don't do very often, it is very difficult subject to come up with something original in, a lot of people write on the subject matter and are very good at it.
The contest prompt really did lend towards the idea of it though.
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