They found them in a dry lagoon basin
In Australia, and also in Texas they've been;
These animals that lived on mud and in
Their layered sheets of only one cell thin.
The experts say their age is plus three billion.
Through microscopes these forms in crystalline
We study and admit with some chagrin,
That this same slime is our dear, distant kin.
Some would closet this, their humble origin,
And not without reservations genuine:
Why who could have said, looking on back then,
This stuff would one day play a violin.
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As a biology teacher I applaud the effort to support the theory of evolution! This reminds me of an old song...
"I heard somewhere that a twist of fate
Made you different from me.
We're branches on the same tree
But it's all too deep for me.
Monkey see, monkey do,
Makes you wonder who's fooling who
Laugh at them
They'll laugh at you.
Monkey see, monkey do."
I enjoyed this. Thanks.
Write on, poet.
Blessings, Myth -
Such Originality!!!
My son a soon to be budding poet himself is struggling to find a muse for his writing I cannot wait to share with him this wonderful piece so that he might be inspired.
Thank you as well for inspiring me!
God Bless ...
zanny
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Indeed! The ancient building blocks from which we sprang. Violin in one hand and a gun in the other. I love your work, poet!
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I think this is a favorite of mine. I love the way you look at nature and the way it is very advanced. For me I believe in a creator, but I think you have left this open and it is not biased to one point of view which is good. It is like an open ended question.
I loved the way you opened this the first line leaves an effect on the readers soul. How they were found in a dry lagoon. Perhaps you could have talked about other species and ancestry, but I love what you have done and the length is just right.
I loved the closing line how this stuff could be played on a violin it is just like the idea comes out of nowhere and leaves the reader feeling very satisfied by the whole poem.
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Excellent!
A track of life through time, with a wry humour. Single-celled slime violinist is a surreal image!
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Excellent.
The lines, the cheeky rhyme and the humor. All combine to make this a piece worth reading, enjoying and remembering.
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Brilliant finale to this piece! I love the way you reduce everything to its one celled beginnings, in the mud of a far distant past, ending with the violin playing genius of today in such a wonderfully simple format!
'We study and admit with some chagrin,
That this same slime is our dear, distant kin.
Some would closet this, their humble origin'
watch out Darwin! lol
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I like the sly, rather tongue-in-cheek feel of some of the lines and the final stanza made me smile. Good, unique piece!
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WOW!
I'm laughing for the first time today, as I read your very clever lines!! I've done some genealogy research and was drawn into your poem by the subject matter. What a surprise to learn that we share ancestors!!!
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Who indeed???? An interesting and informative piece.I appreciate your comments on my poem.Thankyou very much, Ros
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