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Volume Of Life

 
 
 
He stood on the porch with a smile on his face
      remembered the good times they’d had in this place

The old picket fence they painted last year
      before confirmation of their greatest fear

Turning his back he pushed open the door
      and picked up the mail that lay on the floor

Billowing dust in the suns dying rays
      the house they’d left empty for all of those days

Dead flowers in a vase on the old hallway stand,
      her ring on his finger, he glanced at his hand

He kissed the cold metal on warm finger tips,
       and then for a moment, he sensed her sweet lips

His old body wracked with the weight of despair,
      he hauled himself up to the top of the stair

The wide open door to the room of their dreams
      now bleak and abandoned, no more of life’s schemes

In half light he saw the cold empty bed
      and the dint in the pillow made by her head

He glanced at white walls all yellowed with age
      and thought of her death as the turn of a page

The tears stung his face, his grief now exposed
      the book of her life now complete, covers closed.
 
 
 
 



 

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  • ilovemyemo
    April 15
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    aww that was really sad


  • pantress silver member
    March 13, 2008

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    This was superb. From the beginning to the end. Great take on the prompt. Very touching. Best of luck in the contest. Jennifer


  • Dalaney gold member
    March 12, 2008
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    i swear to you i didn't blink once reading this.

    love, lane


  • breedluv gold member
    March 3, 2008
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    Wow! Sue, this reminds of the movie "The Notebook". A powerful poem, indeed.


  • z etoile
    February 29, 2008
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    Awe wow this was an amazing piece! How sad this poem was awesome!


  • Balldinger silver member
    February 29, 2008
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    well crafted into a tear-stream heart wrencher. Your scenery is vivid and touching... ~ EZB


  • kvwriter silver member
    February 29, 2008

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    I know many who feel this way and it saddens me greatly. Grief is an emotion we all will feel. It is our response to loss in any shape or form.

    Humanity's cross to bear . . .

    Stunning, Sue. Thank you!

    --Kel


  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    February 29, 2008

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    Great rhyme and flow to this piece.Wonderful work here. Deep and emotional and strong imagery placed within the reader's head.

    Well done
    Sue.

    Love
    Wayne Leon
    xx


  • Amera gold member
    February 29, 2008

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    Great take on the prompt and penned in wonderful rhyming couplets. Well done!

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    February 28, 2008

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    Got goosebumps!! That was beautiful and sad. Such a story,.. I could see their whole life together and the loneliness now his loved one had passed.
    Gorgeous write!


  • arafura gold member
    February 28, 2008

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    You can write these type of poems so well my friend. You always seem to know how to tell the story in such a compelling way. Good luck in the contest!


  • Legend silver member
    February 28, 2008

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    Yes i can relate to much of this one.A great poem that reflect so much of what goes on when a loved one is lost Having said that there are also so many joys in recalling different days I guess in the end Happiness and Sadness are partners in life and beyond
    Excellent


  • Pete Greenslade gold member
    February 28, 2008
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    yes get ready

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