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One Extra Night

He is mad, he is mad
but I will sit with his
brilliance. Words march
to a solitary hum, enlivened
with the evident thump of
a heart that feels deeply -
and a mind that soars
incessantly with life's
most inherent guise.
Not just a spy but more then that -
a thrill seeking spectator of
the soul, bold,  coasting
untouchable emotions,

penetrating love's devotion.

 

So I shall stay one extra night .

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  • John BoSox
    October 15
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    This is brilliant..I loved it..all of it..Very lovely poem..I can feel your emotions,..congrats

    jOHN


  • Blue Rew silver member
    September 27

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    Intensity burns envisioned as lips in endless movement...
    Seems there's only one voice here, but it has the
    rapt attention of heart as well as ears. Nice layout that
    does not give too much away. Rather, let's us stray down
    our own interpretive paths. Blue

  • Bruce silver member
    September 12
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    I liked this! A thrill seeking spectator of the soul! Well said!

  • Bob Fox
    June 21

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    Poet

    The madder of minds the greater the artist. The more intense the lover and the sadder the heart. I refrain from further comment.


  • monstruo
    January 19
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    I've felt this before.
    I get the impression from this that you must be a good listener.


    • LadyLavender gold member
      January 19
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      thank you! Yes. i'm a great listener; I've learned so much listening.

  • Eusebius
    July 23, 2008

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    bravo

    A most potent and lovely poem here, wonderfully and deftly done throughout! bravo... bravo... bravo..


  • individuality gold member
    June 5, 2008
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    i think i will stay with this name for awhile as it is a favourite of mine, it has some personal meaning to me indi can go in my back pocket


  • Balldinger silver member
    May 22, 2008
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    a weekend's worth...

    she swam in a plastic pool, laps at a time just to get use to the warm water, and just when he escaped his madness, she drowned. it wasn't the first time though. there's more moonlight in one ladle of brokenness than in any warm plastic pool of water - hope the stay was worth it all.

    • LadyLavender gold member
      May 23, 2008
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      Wow, this is one of the most original comments I've ever read. You hit home with this...once someone tried to analyze me and relationships. Conclusion:
      Once something isn't broken...I may leave. Funny, brokeness mirrored my own, so I try to work out what ailed me...still not easy. but yes those moments of moonlight make it all worthwhile.

      V

      P.S. you're brilliant...glad you visted!


      • individuality gold member
        June 5, 2008
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        lol at hit home

        • LadyLavender gold member
          June 5, 2008
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          You see what you've done...mr Individuality? People love this write. Yes you bring out the best in me...madness and all. Smile.

          Thank you.


  • In Too Deep1
    May 1, 2008

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    This is a beautifully penned writ. I loved the style and streamlined flow of absolute emotion and movement. I see that you are somewhat a woman of risks. I am intrigued.


  • funpum
    April 27, 2008
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    Nice. There is a definite presence to a mind like this.


  • buddhax
    April 17, 2008
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    great poem


  • buddhax
    April 17, 2008
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    really deep..draws the reader i


  • aliceramone
    April 11, 2008

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    a great write for Ian...really dig"a mind that soars incessantly with life's most inherent guise"...also a cool ending...great piece.

  • New-n-Improved
    April 6, 2008

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    Amazingly Written

    You have some talent and this poem right here is a testament of your skill. I like the style and I think the poem is very well written. From beginning to end, this was very good. Keep writing and I'll keep reading.


  • Meme Wheeler
    April 2, 2008

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    Oh wow this is great. I imagine the intensity of needed to leave, but having to stay because he draws you back and back again. Wow, to have a love like that would leave me weak...lol!

    Meme

    P.S. Don't we all want that anyway?


  • individuality gold member
    March 28, 2008
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    i am just misunderstood lol not mad


  • Heart Sutra
    March 28, 2008

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    Your poetry has really grown a lot since I have been away. This is possibly my latest favorite by you.

    I like the whole idea behind this too.


  • ten thousand cicadas gold member
    March 28, 2008

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    Really clever, the idea of STAYING with a madman, but it seems in all his madness he is simply too compelling. Really well done.


  • FullMetalAlchemist
    March 28, 2008

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    bravo

    But to what MJ Donnelly said your poetry is great but to simply write is amazing poetry isnt only words on a paper but a feeling in your very soul.


  • FullMetalAlchemist
    March 28, 2008
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    Bravo


  • individuality gold member
    March 22, 2008
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    your poem never won i am shocked to the bloody core i demand a recount

  • judmc
    March 22, 2008

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    Quite Good

    Quite a good poem Flows well clever imagery well chosen phrases.I quite enjoyed reading it George (JUDMC U.K. My latest poem is called "Peter's Girl"
    see what you think Best Wishes!!


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    March 9, 2008
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    Excellent


  • Malabu
    February 28, 2008
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    Amazing!!!

    true true true

    Mal


  • Melodies
    February 27, 2008

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    Smiling especially well and thanking you for honoring our fine master poet, Individuality. He is the kindest poet... always glad to help another poet to learn to write better. He has been my teacher for two years and I am so glad for him. PLUS, TA DA... he is very funny. Your poem is splendid and true. BRAVO!


  • Kiran silver member
    February 27, 2008

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    This is an amazing piece. Yes Individuality is a truly wonderful poet and this is a great dedication piece. Well done with this.


  • Swangrnv gold member
    February 27, 2008
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    well i'll repeat...

    ...what I said before, your do very good dedication pieces! this is very nice.


  • secberm
    February 27, 2008

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    Well, I since I was in the neighborhood, thought I'd drop by to say, "Hi" before other's show. Not big on social gatherings. Gotta go. One.

    Dez


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    February 27, 2008
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    Well, I simply cannot believe that I've been here on AP this long without reading anything by this brilliant poet, until tonight, and frankly, I'm glad that I did. Yes, I see the reason why you chose to write about this 'individual' and this is a fitting tribute indeed.

  • individuality gold member
    February 27, 2008

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    hehehe at the beginning, i thought i was the only sane one left. in the armchair's comfort i ride the spirit and crash into the self. thank you for the poem, i will put the kettle on then if you are staying another night

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