Kiss the hemorrhage
and taste the fever
pouring in the form of ash
109 degrees of separation
divides God from death
and here I rot
The placebo effect baptized me
in a nightmare of tar
scalding dreams on flesh
that now hangs from singed bone
God failed
I cocoon myself in the comfort
of another shadow
finding solace in the paranoia
and the anti-christ
also known as lithium
while I sit at the bottom
of delirium's crater
sneezing the ashes of a savior
who long since betrayed me
A chemical messiah replaces it
to treat the shattered child
How far is the road to revelations
that I wander
chewing on communions of bone
trying to find a salvation alone
shivering
Another pill fills the burdened soul
like confetti
and still the Earth remains numb
and I shake in the manacle of
decay
waltzing in the test tube
of another scientific experiment
I whisper of wars and genocides
and of an outside world
beyond the inferno
but the glass bastards, with their
swastika butterflies
only ignore me
a withering, raving disease
bruised and blistered
swallowed by the monolith
of oblivion
Oh, to wander
to kiss the sick rose and
stumble onward
but I lie in waning sunsets
and fictitious stories
inhaling Jesus
just to keep me alive
dreaming lucidly of dust
and paper
Author notes
I don't know, lol. I just wrote.
A contest entry
- Whatever you so wish! by Shahrazad.
650 points, ended March 6, 2008, 32 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Placebo Effect Magnified by Annexed Josephine.
300 points, ended March 20, 2008, 6 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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very interesting use of imagery and metaphors. very well thought out and written.
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Wow,
What an excellent piece weaved, I can fully understand where you're coming from, sadly.. This world needs a savour..but so many who call upon His name, shed so many tears. I know it says in the word, it rains on the just and the unjust, so, we're in great company. LOL. Peace to pieces. Thanks for sharing you. Pen on poet!
Timothy aka poeticweaver
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i took it like this:
people say if you feel sad or depressed that your faith isn't strong enough in God. this reminds me of an inner conflict of that argument. God vs needed medication. and how God can be a thought placebo effect. well written. but very well done.
i probably took it all wrong. and i am sorry if i did. -
Damn, I know what else to say! I entered that contest and haven't got a hope now haha!
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Firstly - I love the title. From what I read of yours yesterday I already knew this was gonna be full of imagery and unique metaphors, even the first stanza is just packed with them!
109 degrees of seperation
divides God from death - really like that part.
Some really brutal but wonderfully written imagery in the 3rd stanza and the 5th and 6th stanza's are immense (especially the flow). I really like your tiny sidenotes that come between some stanzas.
Your word choice is excellent but more than that your choice of adjacent words, for example "chemical messiah".
chewing on communions of bone - really like that too.
I shake in the manacle of decay - I'm beginning to sound like a broken record but I like that as well
AND waltzing in the test tube.
swastika butterflies
mononlith of oblivion
waning sunsets
inhaling Jesus
Great end too. Wow, what can I say. I'm very impressed x take care x
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Wow... I loved this- very dark an unclear- definately room for interpretations. You played with some really powerful imagery.
This seemed very dream-like... with the unclarity one would experience in a dream- and the odd images mixed with the undertone of metaphor.
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Wow, love love LOVE the idea. When I saw the title I just had to read it. That first stanza is wonderful. In fact, the whole poem is clever, powerful, rebellious. I really like it.
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Thanks! Yes, a little rebellion is always fun
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