Optical delusions
Dimensional illusions
Black holes
Blacker souls
Impossible universe
Federal cutpurse
God is Lucifer &
Evil is just nature
Netted butterflies
Flightless magpies
Mercury seas
Healthy disease
Pitiful planet
Critical climate
Fallen Nephilim
Conquered limb to limb
Rage in the hearts of men
Optical delusions
Dimensional illusions
Rage in the hearts of men
Twenty-four seven
whats going on in your portals girls and boys?
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Very intriguing. The short bursts of words add to its message. The vocabulary is excellent, and the imagery is just stunning. Sort of random, but have you ever heard the song Flagpole Sitta by Harvey Danger? It's kinda similar in its message. Anyways. I rather liked this piece. Kudos.
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wow... This is really powerful... I love how you penned this... So much... that you weren't afraid to say. This is great...
~ amazingly penned, poet
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Cool poem. I like it girl! I like how you play with a really short form and some rhyme. I thought it sounded great and cut right to the chase. I also like to hear political poems because you just don't see many of them and I like to know what other people think of what's going on with the world around them. You did a great job of expressing yourself here.
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I think - hmmm - you're refering to the essence of mankind not being kind and good but rather borderline evil perhaps because of the apathy that permeates our culture. That's the best I can come up with. It's an intriguing piece of work and I imagine required time to conceive. Happy trails
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Holy Crap. I'm blown away. I love this. It's like on of my favorite things I think I've ever read, I'm bookmarking it. It's amazing, wow.
<3erin.
PS: I mean it!
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Good job, I liked it.
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This is awesome! I love the way you set it up and your choice of words was amazing! Keep it up!!
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Good job!
You have given everyone something to think about. Well written and thought provoking!
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A well depicted picture of what our society looks like at the moment. "Optical delusions" was a great phrase to describe how we're hallucinating that what we do isn't wrong. "God is Lucifer & / Evil is just nature" was another perfect part relating to how we've distorted the truth to cover up our wrongdoings. Loved it!
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yay, you get it! Thanks for the comment!
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WOOOOOOOOOOOOOO I love ur style!
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