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Everlasting

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I cannot pray
to just any god
for I'm in awe of
all this splendor.
Surrounded by open sky -
to  release with surrender.

A light that transcends
space and time,
It is in all, for I
bask in totality.
Tranquility calls out
my name, as these

moments truly enchant me.

Again,  I feel in spirit,
as a soft wind seeps
through my lashes.
And whatever they call
it by name, I will call
it  love  everlasting.

 

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  • pearlstp
    June 17

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    Wonderful

    Line 1-2 I cannot pray to any God...Oh the spiritual implication here. I concur. Neither will I. (wink) Glory!


  • thepoetssoul
    April 7

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    Beautiful poem..
    The rhythm is splendidly soft and flows magically
    Love it, be blessed in all you do.

    Tony


  • ten thousand cicadas gold member
    March 25

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    Love the ethereal, but simple feel here. A recognition of something greater, unexplainable... but able to be fully experienced. Love that concluding line!


  • fjola
    February 20

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    I think I can say that you basically spoke for me in this! (meaning, my thoughts exactly...but yours are worded much better...)


  • SheWasPreternatural
    December 9, 2008
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    Oh my word. The flow here.... outstanding. Very descriptive and enthralling.
    "A light that transcends
    space and time,
    It is in all, for I
    bask in totality.
    Tranquility calls out
    my name, as these
    moments truly enchant me." - Truly masterful.
    and the picture added to my visual sense as i was reading. i am blown away by the talent here LL. - T

  • a n e s t h e s ia
    December 9, 2008

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    Wow. "as a soft wind seeps through my lashes". What a poetic delicacy. . Spiritually perfect, a further sense of what is.


  • Cry Wolf
    November 2, 2008

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    Very beautiful. Salvador Dali is my favorite painter this poem is excellent, it embraces the senses with power and a graceful flow.

    • LadyLavender gold member
      November 3, 2008
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      Thankyou for your comment..I hadn't read this poem in awhile, so I did this morning and felt such a sense of tranquality come about me. Thanks for doing this. Smile.


  • lunarlunacy
    September 25, 2008
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    yes yes yes yes yes yes a million times over..


  • aliceramone
    March 3, 2008

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    the flow to this is excellent with good rhyme... an open window of imagery that sways everlasting surrender...very well done.thanks for entering and good luck in the contest


  • marc creamore
    February 28, 2008

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    Lady L . . . oh so beautifully stated!!! You have captured the essence of a wide open and seeking soul in this one!!


  • Pisces rainbow gold member
    February 28, 2008

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    SOME IMAGINE GOD IN HUMAN FORM, BUT GOD IS AN ESSENCE (SPIRIT) WITHIN US WE CAN HEAR THE WHISPERS AND FEEL THE NUDGES, IT IS A KNOWING IMPRINTED IN THE CORE OF ALL HUMAN BEINGS. YOU HAVE PUT THIS TRUTH IN A BEAUTIFUL FORM. GOD BLESS


  • individuality gold member
    February 27, 2008

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    a moment snatched out of time and loved with relaxation's spirit, the open world is there for all, right outside the window, a good poem.


  • secberm
    February 27, 2008

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    Spectacular, sister. How fitting... Salvador Dali. LOL Write on, poetess. Write on. One.

    Dez


  • Bams
    February 27, 2008

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    sweet for circulation

    this bespeaks of a user friendliness of life to realize

    and declare, drawn in it a freedom of reinforcement. as a special recent reading of a verse showed for me : "God is love, and he that remains in love remains in union with God and God remains in union with him." It's the second half of 1 John 4:16. I think your take to 'bask in totality' is an excellent augmentation of the prompt and the melding ways implied.

    interrelatedness can be delightful,
    babies are my subject


  • Heart Sutra
    February 27, 2008
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    beautiful


  • DogFish silver member
    February 26, 2008
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    It is a lovely painting...and your's is a fitting poem!

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