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The Weight of Pain

There is a pain that's deep within; that one cannot let go.
The pain is chained into my heart and the weight hangs heavy there.
You cannot run from place to place to leave the pain behind.
It follows you and drags you down into the deepest and darkest of holes.
You cannot talk or speak of it or you will be left alone.
Alone and chained with an anchor of pain.
It would be better to let go and drown.

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  • Captain Amber SL
    April 26
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    This is a really good poem. Short and sweet, showing emotion without obcuring that emotion with unneeded words. It's got lots of despair in it, and you can feel the emotion almost creeping out of the poem and into the reader.

    I wish you the best of luck, and keep writing and improving your poetry. ^__^

    Aeris Silverlight


  • PoetryDove
    August 4, 2008

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    It's short, but I do like it.
    I think that it's a great piece.

    It's very deep, even though the length isn't much. It means a lot and I think there's a lot beneath the words. Beautiful.

    sarah
    p.s. sorry it took me forever to comment -_-


  • newnoakua
    June 12, 2008
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    Wow, short, sweet, and full of sorrow.

    Great job and best of luck in the contest


  • maralisa silver member
    June 3, 2008

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    here is a pain that's deep within; that one cannot let go.
    The pain is chained into my heart and the weight hangs heavy there.
    You cannot run from place to place to leave the pain behind.
    It follows you and drags you down into the deepest and darkest of holes.
    You cannot talk or speak of it or you will be left alone.wow I can relate to your words from my heart good luck in the contest


  • Nothing But No
    May 26, 2008

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    Amazing write, but the title could have been better. Thank you for entering and best of luck in the contest.


  • FallenFromGrace1102
    April 30, 2008

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    great write keep it up i really liked this i wish you the best of luck in my contest and thank you ever so much for adding something to it.

    *~*bee*~*

  • Labefaction
    April 30, 2008

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    I like it ... very good descriptions of what pain really feels like, and nice and short without excess. Thank you.


  • nobodys-girl
    April 28, 2008
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    a great way to describe pain. thankyou so much for entering my contest and best of luck!!!


  • N e a r
    April 22, 2008
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    As one of the shorter writes in this contest, this makes its point without too much clutter. Straight to the point, really, and it really gives out that heavy weight of a feeling. The last three lines were really strong. I liked it. Thanks for your entry.


  • Dutch Doll
    February 28, 2008

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    You leave the reader with a very heavy feeling after reading this, good job getting your feelings across, thanks for entering

    Adriana


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    February 27, 2008

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    beautifully written with a strong sense of feeling abused in it well done and best of luck with this

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