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blooms of dawn

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tiny fluttering quills, painting my garden bright,

- what a sight to see, your little wings all a flight ~

 

arriving just in time to brighten my day,

- kissing my blossoms before going on your way ~

 

a splash of color you add here and there,

- pollen from waking lilies you wear ~

 

fragrant wisps you lite upon,

- taking bounty from morning blooms of dawn ~

 

my palette of flowers will miss you when you're gone,

- come back and visit, it is of you, I have grown very fond ~

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Not a rhymer, but thanks for the challenge

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  • islekine gold member
    April 24, 2008

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    Well Bear...

    First let me say, without hurting your feelings...
    I have seen you pen so much better! lol
    Couldn't resist!
    Write on!
    Take care...
    *PEACE*
    Julie


  • NeonRose
    April 18, 2008
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    Oh, lovely...nature is my favorite poetry theme, and this one is just beautiful!


  • Gwenevere
    March 18, 2008

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    Lovely.Makes me long for the summer instard of this cold damp weather we have at the moment.You are a rhymer you see.Just needed to try it.Have a great evening or day, whichever it is where you are at the moment, Ros


  • Patpowers silver member
    March 13, 2008

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    EXCELLENT! What a nice work of poetic beauty.I liked the picture here Arkbear. THANKS AGAIN MY FRIEND!!


  • Cynthia
    March 4, 2008

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    Excellent

    WOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!
    The first time I saw this picture, I was thinking of the picture I took of a Hummingbird Bumblebee just last summer.
    This looks so much like it.
    Weird.
    LOL
    This write, I find, fits this picture perfectly.
    Finely penned piece of poetry my friend.
    Well done.
    Best of luck to you.
    Keep up with the great work.
    Keep on penning.
    Thank you so very much for sharing your wonderful talents with us.


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    March 4, 2008

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    You have lovely rhyme in this beauty. Some gentle personification in this piece. I would have liked to see more character in this little critter. Feel free to tweak. I will be back before the contest close for a second look. Thank you for your entry. ~Pamela


  • Lyndon gold member
    February 28, 2008

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    This poem is a blend of metaphor and mild personification. You have mym permission to strengthen this if you wish.

    • Arkbear gold member
      February 28, 2008
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      Good morning Lyndon ~

      Since I am in the middle of carpenters running through my home as we speak, and concentrating on poems right now is not possible.....so, this is about as strong as this poem is going to get for now.......Judge it as you see it.....and very much appreciated for your time Sir

      Bear ~


  • In Too Deep1
    February 27, 2008

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    A very warm and beautiful take on the prompt. I think that if we only would take the time to leer beyond the blooms of our gardens, we would find many wonders who share in our delight. Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the comp


  • Poesing
    February 27, 2008

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    What a sweet little poem for a most unusual looking "bug". I think you rhymed quite well, actually!
    Good luck in the contest!


  • Pisces rainbow gold member
    February 27, 2008

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    very sweet, your words just seem to dance my friend beautifully. God bless


  • maralisa silver member
    February 27, 2008

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    this is fantastic my pallete of flowers will miss you when you're gone come back and visit itis of you i have grown fond a beautiful poem and picture my friend good luck in the contest


  • RyanosaurusWrecks
    February 26, 2008

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    not a rhymer? well at least you have definately graced this contest with words that do more than describe the picture, they bring the reader into a garden. forcing scents into nostrils, and open lungs to the freshness of morning...great write


  • aboomer silver member
    February 26, 2008

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    I think you did very well with the rhyme - it read smoothly. Love your wording - very descriptive; easy to picture. I love to see those little 'quills' in my gardens - I could almost picture them as being tiny fairies or angels flitting among my flowers.
    This was lovely.
    Good luck in your contest.

  • Lady Dragonwyck
    February 26, 2008

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    What a delightful interlude with the lovely visitor to the garden. I very much enjoyed. Good luck in the contest.

    Lady D

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