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Haiku 107

I look sick,
I feel sick, my nose runs and
I can't run after it.

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  • maa gold member
    February 28, 2008

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    excellent !
    you gave me a big chuckle with this one ...
    perfect double entendre ...

    all the best,
    maa


  • misticmoonlite gold member
    February 27, 2008

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    lol I would have to say it would be hard to keep up with nose ahead of face lol good job on this,good luck...Moons


  • Pollycheck
    February 26, 2008

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    I look sick,
    I feel sick, my nose runs and
    I can't run after it.

    Thank you for entering my contest. I really like the play on words and I am glad to see that you pared it down to under 17 syllables.

  • Chaotic Decorum
    February 26, 2008

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    Very slick. I see I'm the only one whose's noticed this isn't a 5.7.5... It's a 5.7.6. Don't believe me? Take you time counting syllables. Good write.


  • myron silver member
    February 26, 2008

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    funny

    ah yes - this is very funny. well done! i like the word-play in it!

    but did you see that Polly didn't want any 5.7.5 haiku for this contest? perhaps you could prune it down a little?

    best wishes,
    myron.


    • Shenton silver member
      February 26, 2008
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      Myron

      Yes, it was 5.7.6. but, following your suggestion, I've now pruned it down to 3.7.6

      Thank you for your comment.

      Shenton

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