The world's at war inside my head
Filled with broken dolls with cupid lips
Where angels walk on broken glass
Their mouths are taped their wings all clipped
Insanity rules the caustic night
Where sleep deprivation is the norm
The pills still rattle in the glass
Left over from last night's storm
And yet you ask so much of me
When I have nothing I can give
It's hard enough to rise each day
I suppose the dead have no will to live
So watch me go through every hoop
And we'll raise our glasses high
Then toast the toast to end it all
Watching angels falling from the sky
And soon you won't recognize
The face I wear for you each day
Because silence brings its own rewards
With those words we never say...
Author notes
dstreetpoet
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Comments
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I love the setup of this poem and it's flow and word choice. great work!
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Shancy was your judge for the contest… Because of the abundance of entries... we are having trouble getting two scores for each poem...I would just like to thank you anyway for entering and participating in our contest and good luck,
~luminescence
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I relate to this poem. I like the way it says what it has to say. Thank you for entering and participating in this contest. Good luck. Your score: Title: 9 Diction: 8 Syntax: 8 Wowness: 8 Total: 33. Shancy.
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This is good...i really liked this poem based just on how it was written, plus I liked it based on the content...Thank you for entering, and I will keep you updated
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This was an interesting poem, although not a particularly moving one. I noticed that in the first stanza, "tapped" should be "taped." Thanks so much for your entry and good luck!
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This reminds me of Iraq and other countries that are not as well off in this day and age. I like the flow of the poem, even though the rhyme wasn't exact. The images your writing portrays are both gloomy and sad. I like the wording of the poem; simple, yet elegant. though some of your lines may have had too many syllables, which put the flow off a tiny bit.
Overall, I must say, I like the ideas in your poem. Thanks you for entering.
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