I wish I could scream
could burst into tears
I wish I had a voice
that shuts up every noise
If only I could see
that face in my dreams
with those big brown eyes
behind which a maze hides
It's guilt shame pain that I feel
can't get them out, they're stuck deeply deep
I can cause that face a lot
destruction, complication but I won't
and it knows that I can
but just inside lurks no fear
If only I could prove that's it's so damn poor
that I can commit a crime
and to kill it sure I can
it's all about seeing
that face in my dreams
I'll kill it yes indeed
and finally be relieved
There's nothing I actually aim
but get rid of guilt, shame and pain
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Ah..a tearful and painful work is here..the thought structure is full of the guilty and the words are aiming to sketch the scenario of the self..I am touched by the description of this work..a wonderful work indeed..thansks for sharing..well done...
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If only I could prove that's it's so damn poor
that I can commit a crime
and to kill it sure I can
it's all about seeing
that face in my dreams
I'll kill it yes indeed
and finally be relieved
Great write -
The first stanza reminds me of a poem I wrote a while ago, theme is different but it' the same subject. You've penned a great poem here, I liked how you wish to hurt and cause pain because you've been caued pain but still hold it back and do none of that.
~Noor
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awesome
the first stanza is the best
especially the last line (in that stanza)
everything is just so...so...awesome
i love it...
thanks for entering my contest -
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Hello!
I'm extremely glad to hear that.. thank you for your encouragement and you comment.
Lubna
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very dark and well thought this was extremly good
it seems to be loaded
thank you for entering!!
**kat
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