It's been to long,
I can't hold out anymore,
I've got to go back,
Where I belong,
I can't resist,
Your soft lips,
Your strong embrace,
Your deadly bliss,
I surrender
I surrender,
As I stand here,
At your side,
I'll never leave you,
I whisper in your ear,
I can't resist,
Your soft lips,
Your strong embrace,
Your deadly bliss,
I surrender
I surrender,
I can't resist,
Your soft lips,
Your strong embrace,
Your deadly bliss,
I surrender
I surrender,
I surrender unto you...
Author notes
Ok, so this is a VERY rough draft for a song. Any ideas you have to help me improve it would be gratefully received.
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Astonishing!
Pulled at my heartstrings and even a tear or two. I am male and straight, but I still loved this one. Even if this isn't a song yet (as far as I know) GREAT JOB!!
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i don't know alot about songs, but this is really good i think. i dont know what i could tell u for additions, just keep writin! good job
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