Ruby eyes
blood shot without relief
waiting for some light
to free her from her prison
From which she will cast a spell
to torture the eyes of all
young and the old
with her decrepit words
While wearing her silk soul dress
ever so carefully laced with malice
as she walks through the town
creating fire with every malevolent step
But to her dismay she is still caged
chained with the irons of heaven
for they believe her destruction
to be the end of the world
So as her eyes close
she can hear the sweet screams
as they are wounded by her laugh
calling her the disease, the evil psychopath.
Author notes
Prompt-1] an evil physco
This is a little story about my muse....
Hope you everyone enjoys it!
A contest entry
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Comments
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LOL... I'm sure you were serious but I love the image of a chained muse that fights us... so it seems at times
... Very entertaining and well put together... (I love story lines 
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Wow, this one is beautiful. I've always wanted to be able to write like this, but i can never seem to be able to put as much imagery into my work and make it come out as nice. I love this
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That s a very dark muse and I love it. It was kinda scary and creepy and that I absolutly adored. Well done especially here:
So as her eyes close
she can hear the sweet screams
as they are wounded by her laugh
calling her the disease, the evil psychopath.
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shadow...i love your poem.
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Thank you baby!
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great write, thank you for entering the contest, good luck.
♥
whisper
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I loved this one. I really enjoyed reading about your evil muse.
you did a great job on this.
thank you for entering and good luck
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Thank you very much for your wonderful comment, and for silver!
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Finally and evil muse My fave kind. A wonderfully piece, laced with deep dark imagery. Extremely well penned. Thank you for entering our contest and good luck
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Lol, thank you for your wonderful comment, and for the awesome contest! Your welcome, I loved writing it...
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Aww, your muse sounds pretty awesome Great write, you have a beautiful way with words. Thanks for entering!
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Thank you very much, and your welcome!
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I like Dark Muses...they're much more entertaining than good ones, lol.
nice introduction to your muse. She sounds like a good ol' fashoined bitch, lol.
Nice write.
Good luck!
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Yes they are awesome!
Thank you very much, I'm glad it described her well...
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