The words on the tomb
long to speak to a rose
beautiful, covered in petals
laying upon cold marble unaware
does not read the writing,
nor does it know death is nigh
Waiting until the sky
is full of night
October winds ready
to make their chilling rounds
mock fading words engraved
no peace for some
Whistles for the angels
time for them to carry
old Sara up to God
to leave a rose alone to die
though watered today
by a thousand tears
Author notes
option #3 Picture prompt - SORROW
Carly Pop
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Shancy was your judge for the contest… Because of the abundance of entries... we are having trouble getting two scores for each poem...I would just like to thank you anyway for entering and participating in our contest and good luck,
~luminescence
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I like the way you laid out the poem. This was a nice read. Thank you for entering and participating. Good luck. Your Score: Title: 8 Diction: 8 Syntax: 8 Wowness factor: 8 Total: 32. Shancy.
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THank you for the entry and submission it is a pretty poem however it does not follow guide lines of the 54 words or less. You are more then welcome to submit one that follows these guide lines.
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This is really beautiful. Truly one of those pieces you cannot help but tear up as you read.
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Thank you for your beautiful entry, good luck, Josie
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Wow. This piece hit me real strong...(and bad grammar can bite me now, I really don't care.) This piece.....again, wow. My favorite line by far is;
"October winds ready
to make their chilling rounds
mock fading words engraved
no peace for some"
No other words. Wow.
Thanks for the entry, best of luck!
-Vivian
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Sad but beautiful...
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So very good, nice and comforting yet staying in a poetic flavor.
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