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breathing barnacles

I breathe velvet barnacles
a gift of music for the jester king
While the government is in a sad state
of near-dementia

I show Kate her pancreas
a gift of words for a blind penguin
Where the cavemen, as of late
fiddle catatonia

I drain another dream or two
a gift of lies for the man in blue
Whose policemen chop up Russians
For their pyromania

I shave dentist labourers
a gift of hurts from our home-grown flue
With cutting edges to surprise
Even the illiterate

who cannot even read the
Time
to fight the power


I breathe velvet barnacles

and it hurts

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  • daisygirlk
    May 9, 2008

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    confusing, but in my current state of exhaustion I am under the weird impression that everything makes sense. Very interesting I sort of thought of th ocean, and then it was kind of like traveling, flipping through a few different scenes. I like the barnacles. I look at barnacles a lot... they're actually weirdly creepy. Like.. i dunno. Oh my gosh! Definitely parts of this make sense to me, and well, I like the penguins. Sorry if this is nonsense... I'm really should be sleeping.


    • obscenegesture
      May 9, 2008
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      Thanks! I didn't write this to make sense, I doubt I could ever properly explain what it's all about. I wrote it hoping it would mean something. Hope you get some sleep!


  • Rhapsody
    May 8, 2008
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    this left me confused


  • Nocturne
    May 6, 2008

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    Oh very nice. I was surprised to see the language play, and lexicon of this piece. Lovely sounds, wonderful medley of imagery and metaphors.


  • Mistress Masquerade
    May 6, 2008

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    hmm.. this left me a little confused and longing for an explination. though to me it made veyr little sense the flow is amazing.


  • storiesuntold gold member
    May 6, 2008
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    What a muse here

    Amazing write I would have never thought ogf putting the two together very interesting indeed


  • madgirlslovesong
    February 26, 2008
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    i read a few of your poems, and i really, really enjoy your style.


  • Everwind Rising
    February 26, 2008
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    You weave imagery effortlessly in this piece. Really unique and engaging imagery!


    • obscenegesture
      February 26, 2008
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      That means a lot coming from you, I really enjoy your poems as well! Cheers.

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