the sky
in balance on my stretched toes -
a headstand
Author notes
Prompt ~ We could be upside down but never fall
In a list
A contest entry
- Holding on by Lavender Butterfly.
390 points, ended February 26, 2008, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This is marvelous . . . and very original. In the spirit of Myron, who says that a haiku is never finished, would it be even stronger without the "a" in the final line? Just a thought - this clearly rates the gold!
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just beautiful...Love the entire image..congrats on the gold!
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I laughed
You got me. It took almost 15 seconds to register in my brain. This is a form that I'm beginning to study. It looks like you have already mastered it. What a picture to create
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I am a student, too ...
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AHA!
Hello there!
This is a haiku with a lovely haiku moment of surprise and revelation in the final line. It makes me see how the sky was balanced on your toes! Great concept and a very good observation. Were you doing yoga at the time?
Congratulations on your well deserved Gold Trophy!
Have a gr8 day,
BJ.
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smart cookie
you're a smart cookie, aren't you ?
you are perfectly right about the yoga ...
thank you for having had the courage and patience to browse through the jungle of my poetry to find some haiku ... which gives me the motivation to put them into a list ... will prioritize that task ...
marion
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Congratulations on the golden chalice!!!
Really enjoyable reading - this beautiful piece is! I'm so happy to see this poem took first place as it is most deserving!! Very unique!!! I look forward to reading more of your work. Take care 
Peace, Cyn
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Congratulations on a well deserved Gold!
What a vivid picture you've sketched! Well done Marion!
Love
Myra
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wow, this haiku is DIVINE!! such a nexcellent image you've painted here- you're truly an amazing painter... a lovely piece.
- namita
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Hey Marion...this is a delightful Haiku/Senryu.
It presents a vivid imagery.
Congrats on the Gold!
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Very clever
Hope you aare well Marion.
Jim
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Wonderful piece Marion - and isn't it nice when we're able to balance something in this crazy life?
A beautiful take on the prompt and well deserving of all the recognition.
e~
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the sky
in balance on my stretched toes -
a headstand
what a wonderful haiku! I love it1!
it's a great concept and it gives clear images in the way that good haiku do.
very nicely done.
best of luckjin the contest,
myron.
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How well you have done this one!
I couldn't help but seeing the moon on your toes...
in the sky
balanced on my toes
the moon
Lovely imagery your haiku has given!
haiku on marion
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you are certainly clairvoyant ...
yesterday, I made a little drawing with the ocean, a dolphin and the moon sending her healing light spiraling down ... maybe you were hiding in my aura when I did this ?
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I have this fascination towards the moon
Would love to see your drawings
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it's in my garbage-can, torn up in pieces
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You point us toward the sky and let our imaginations fly freely. Lovely one, congratulations!
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A great imagery. Perfectly awarded Gold. Congratulations.
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Maa, This is brilliant, beautiful imagery and awesome revelation in the last line... congratulation on winning Gold...
mina
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Precious!!
Now this is one Beautiful piece You have penned by a Beautiful Gem!!
Wow~~
Just Love this Marion
Brilliant take on the prompt~~
Oy!!
Loved this Haiku
Congratulations on Your Trophy win!
-Throws confetti-
Woooooooooo Hoooooooooooo
Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
Best wishes too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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What alovely poem you have penned in this haiku - such a contrast, that aha moment is wonderful here. Congratulations on the gold trophy, well deserved.
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This is such a cool concept, I love the lightness of the feeling within this piece, so much conveyed in so few well-chosen words. A very positive moment to start my day!
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It's an interesting prompt. Sort of Atlas in reverse, though balancing the sky would probably prove lighter in weight than the earth...ignore me.
I'm long beyond my headstand days, though if someone were to grab my legs and hoist me up and lend me a mirror to look up with...I'm sure before I passed out, I'd see the sky between the divisions of my toes.
Beyond my silliness, I like the feeling, that all is in balance (i.e. right with the world, etc) or under control...and here's a thought...even in this topsy turvy world, we can keep our balance...see, haiku can be fun to interpret like any poem.
BTW, Congrats on the gold!
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Phenomenal. What a magnificent dream-like image. Balancing the sky upon one's toes. How perfectly enchanting.
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wow ~ amazingly clever and enchanting... x
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