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No

Her eyes shouted

what her lips could not say.

Handing back the box

after closing the lid,

never expecting her to react

with dull and distant orbs

when seeing the engagement ring.

 

It ripped across his heart

as if a giant pair of shears

had cut his beating organ

in two dead pieces.

 

His world collapsed

into hell's abyss,

sucking his spirit

into an ashen cerebral ooze

that ate hope

as if it were an acid.

 

Oh the viper's bite

that his broken fantasies

did invent.

Slithering around his mind

squeezing the life from spirit.

 

Waves of anguish's toxins

followed that fall

from love's alluring pinnacle

where he thought tomorrow

would be a honeymoon.

 

Now lying in solitude's tomb

tormented with pity's constant ache,

how sad it is to have tried to fly

only to crash into the soil

and live in crippling agony ever after. 

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prompt - pain and dissappointment

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  • going nowhere
    February 25, 2008
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    wonderfully sad. the images you allow with your words are incredible!


  • Desire gold member
    February 25, 2008

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    Wow!!

    This is one painful read
    So sad and the emotions drip from the ink~~

    These lines grab~~
    Waves of anguish's toxins
    followed that fall
    from love's alluring pinnacle
    where he thought tomorrow
    would be a honeymoon.

    Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
    Many blessings to You in the contest Sweetness
    Best wishes too
    and my Love~ Desire~*~