Phantom Ship (Part II)
He looked out, from onboard the ship
hoping and praying that she'd be there
he had thought of her every single day
whilst away, on the clipper, 'Ocean Air'
Gone for many months, a life at sea
braving treacherous waves and storms
trading goods with many foreign lands
but at last, he would soon be home
He thought of her and nothing else
bringing home trinkets and this time, a ring
he would ask her for her hand in marriage
and give up this life of constant sailing
With scope in hand, he espied the shore
and spotted her running to the beach
it won't be long, she'll be in his arms
and for her hand, he would soon beseech
Just then, her vision began to fade
his heart sank as he feared the worst
what illusion was this that she'd disappear
the ship, now encompassed by a mist
Soon his harbor home was out of sight
yet another storm came rolling in
all hands on deck, they did their best
manned the moorings to keep from sinking
But they'd done this many times before
it's second nature when your life is the sea
they'd bring the clipper out of the storm
and return again, to the harbor's safety
And sure enough, the winds did calm
the clipper and men safe, yet once again
but the storm had pushed them back out to sea
losing time, they would sail back in
This time he did not see his love
waiting for him upon the sandy shore
and something else, he'd never realize
they'd not be coming home anymore
~PennyLynne~
Author notes
Well I've never made a sequal before but I thought this one deserved one...to see it from HIS side...I enjoyed trying this and I hope you enjoy reading it...thanx
Written November 26th, 2003
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I love seeing the story from the perspective of the sailor forever lost at sea! Haunting, sad, but very romantic tale, Penny!
<3 Maureen
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Hi Tamara. I hope you had a wonderful turkey day!
Our's is in October (shorter growing season up here in the northern tundra LOL). Thank you so much for reading/commenting, your visits are always very much appreciated
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Now I have to catch up and read part 1, this is heart wrenching beautiful
elegantly stated is the fate of tidal waves and love....
it comes and it goes...
hhhmmmm
you got me thinking dear
good to see yo online again!
belated Happy Turkey Day
Tamara -
Actually Bud, it wasn't quite a happy ending LOL Maybe I should have prefaced this a bit...or, might have helped if I'd put the 2 poems closer together. I tried not to go along the same story line as other poems of mine..always try for a different twist as not to get repetitious LOL
In part I, she moves away, trying to work him out of her heart, knowing he'd been lost at sea...to live there with the phantom ship appearing would be a painful and constant reminder. In part II, it's more from his perspective and not knowing he died and can't come home again...but always returning in hopes of seeing her there. The irony of it is that he planned to marry her, give up the sea and it's too late for both of them. Hmmm, maybe it needs some polish to make it more clear LOL
Anyway....thank you ever so much for taking the time to read. Your visits and comments are very much appreciated
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A Happy ending. No more going out to sea....together always eternally. Nice writing and has a historical feeling. I'm sure many have been through what you wrote about. ~Bud~
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Home? Wassat???
Actually, I logged off line last night for bed, but forgot to send my sister something she asked me to, so I logged back on....and the AP start page is my start page, and since you're listed in my favorites, I saw the part two so I had to read it.
And now, I have to go send that thing to my sister, since I forgot last night
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Barbara...do you have a home??? or is AP it??? LMAO Everytime I post a poem, you're right there with a comment ..but I do appreciate it so very much. I look so forward to your visits...you've got me spoiled!!!
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okay..this is 
....gave me chills, like part one did, but this time I had to sniff back a tear.
Wonderfully written, great rhythm and rhyme, and a beautifully haunting poem that works so well with part one.....sometimes, the sequel is as good as the original.
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