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Sunken Heart

~by Gregg Rowe~

Hark my
heart of hearts!
Where art thou go?
Leaving me sunken like
a war ship sitting on
an ocean's bed
blood rusting
alone

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  • Kuranya gold member
    February 26, 2008
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    This is certainly an interesting piece, I am not sure about the Shakespearian part, the tense seems not quite right but I don't know enough to be sure... but nice metaphor in this one

    Thanks for taking the time to enter, wishing you the best of luck

    Karen


  • LadyDementia gold member
    February 26, 2008
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    Nice! I like it a lot. Imagery is interesting. Good luck