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Paint Inside Me

Paint me my love
Don’t do it quickly
Paint with your heart
Let it feel me briskly
Feel me up inside you do
But paint me gently as I do you too
My love will show from you now
Paint me before if your hurried
Don’t come back though to admire me
Are you worthy than paint me now
With all your heart I take you as well
Paint me later
Have no time neither to I
But feel me up with color oh so
Make me wish to be with you
Your love will show from here
On out so paint me briskly but not so quickly
Because I love you and I choose you
For the moment to paint inside me

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  • JimmyHallam
    March 8, 2008
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    loved it

    so sweet


  • quantumsurveyor
    February 26, 2008
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    This is an open expressin of love in a unique way. I would suggest that the power and shape of this indicate that you have more strength as a writer of poetry than of stories. There are errors of English and of sense but you have style and content.