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My Friend, The Whip

‘Think outside the box,’ they said,

‘Give us something different,’ they command.

So with their orders resounding in My head

The Rebel Poet is defying the demand.

I am going inside the box! My toy box!

 

 

It’s no big secret, nor will it bring anyone shock,

That for My carnal pleasures I revel in BDSM,

I am a Domina; I want My sex fun to rock!

So to the tools of My sensation, time to meet one of them,

A friend of Mine, for so very long, My favourite plaything.

 

 

My whip - a sweet, delicious, single tail.

Plaited leather worn soft to suede by use,

Delivers an instant smart and a nerve tingling trail.

Perfect for correction or pleasure, the senses to confuse.

Fine handle, so stiff and erect, ideal phallic to fuck.

 

 

I love to make her kiss it, show her adoration.

Thanking My whip; for bringing her to her knees.

Just kisses, no more, the lash wants its salutation,

Striping her bared flesh, breast, ass, and pussy, to tease.

Relentlessly pushing, until finally she whimpers and begs!

 

 

Again, make her show her appreciation to the whip.

Open mouth, taken in deep, lick and suck!

Eyes don’t miss a thing, how eager is her lip,

Hold tight to her hair; make her give the oral fuck.

So open is she, revelling in her sexuality.

 

 

‘Kiss the whip, My slut,’ cool fingers, now soothing,

Welts burning red, fire on her skin, easing the pain.

My own lil slave girl; ready and willing to sate My whim.

Now My desire, for which she has worked so hard to train,

Pulling the whip, moist from her mouth, offering it to her.

 

 

'Now slave,' it’s time for her to show Me just how much,

She loves the tail that I use to thrill her, possess her too.

Pushing the handle in her hot pussy, happy to rock,

No shyness now, lets Me watch this wonderful view.

From a shy submissive to wanton whore to the lash

 

 

Simple toy of BDSM, made of suede and leather,

You have given Me so much over so many years.

Pain, pleasure, sex and games, such fun together,

It should be I that says thank you without any tears.

Not tonight My friend, we have another session to complete!

Author notes

Option 4: The Whip

 

DLC-Jem

 

Now the challenge is over I can add some personal notes. This piece is in loving memory of My gabbie, I miss her so much, my best friend, confidente and lover.

 

Für meine Gabrielle ich liebe Dich Baby, immer. Wir waren eins im Herzen, Körper und Verstand. Für immer Ihren ESMF

 

Welcome back everyone....

I will get straight to your challenge for this next round.

I asked each of you to pick a number from 1-8 and I got very quick responses from you...thank you.

Now, each number corresponds to what your challenge is going to be. However, before I get to your challenges, let me give you your stipulations and what we would like to see in this round.

~LINE LIMIT~
NO LESS THAN 30 LINES
NO MORE THAN 50 LINES

~PLEASE MAKE ALL BACKGROUNDS A SOLID COLOR AND A FONT THAT IS READABLE (NO CUSTOM OR PICTURED BACKGROUNDS THIS ROUND)

~THINK OUTSIDE THE BOX AND AWAY FROM THE NORM
(LAST ROUND THERE WAS SOME PRETTY INTERESTING ENTRIES AND I WOULD LIKE TO SEE MORE OF THAT

~GET AS CREATIVE AS YOU CAN

Now for your challenges...

DLC-Jem

Number picked 1

BDSM

 

To give Myself a challenge here I chose to go with a touch of My reality, a truth or dare if you will, so the truth of a wonderful scene played to the extremes with My then submissive. So the challenge for Me was to share something of Myself with whoever reads.

In a list

A contest entry

    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression?
    Line numbers  • Invite them to read
    : no Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have (?)

Comments

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  • CrystalMoon7290
    April 27, 2008
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    Aww that's sweet how you dedicated this to your lover.


    • Corvus Corone
      April 27, 2008
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      Thank you for the trophy too will keep my eyes peeled for next time

    • Corvus Corone
      April 27, 2008
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      She was a wonderful girl and this piece a wonderful memory. Thank you.


  • ImmanuelC888
    March 9, 2008

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    This is one of the very few BDSM poems that seem beautiful and touching in a way for me. I really enjoyed how the language which seems very innocent at first change it's nature and become a bit rude at times.


    • Corvus Corone
      March 9, 2008
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      A Dominant although sensitive to their submissive and flexible to their needs also has to be able to keep a firm grip on a situation therefore there there is a stark contrast between beautiful and touching and the abrupt stronger language. Thank you for your comment!

      Jem


  • tanzanite
    February 29, 2008

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    How perfect this was. You captured the s/m, the D/s and you did it so well. I could not have asked for more if I had challenged you to this. This was awesome stuff darling. You are quite the accomplished Mistress and poet. Well done on this great piece that touched my heart and some other parts ...


    • Corvus Corone
      March 1, 2008
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      25 years in our wonderful lifestyle paid off here me thinks tanz, thank you. If you wanna challenge me I'd be honoured to try


  • Margaret Denham gold member
    February 28, 2008

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    The more I read of BDSM, the more I learn and this was an amazing learning tool. Extremely personal and beautifully written in its own unique way. Thank you for the insight.

    Margaret


    • Corvus Corone
      February 28, 2008
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      Thank you for your comment, it really has made me smile. Thank you. As a side, if ever you want to ask anything BDSM related feel free to just ask I am always happy to give my outlook.

      Jem


  • shimmer
    February 26, 2008
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    here's my scores

    spelling and grammar=18 lack of punctuation before the corrections were made.
    originality=20
    presentation=20
    how well you handled the challenge=20
    overall=19

    total=97


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    February 26, 2008
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    All I can say is wow. Enojyed this here piece. Indeed i am enjoying the start of these reads in this round. Best of luck to you.


    spelling/grammar - 20
    presentation - 20
    originality - 20
    how well you handled challenge - 19.5
    overall - 20

    99.5 congrats on your score

    Passions


  • shimmer
    February 26, 2008

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    no question about it, this is good and you met your challenge. i am at a lost though because the other judges mentioned the lack of punctuation and yet i am seeing it here. it was from my understanding in one of the topic boards that any correction that was pointed out should be made after the round was over and not before. the heck of it is, i also write some things without punctuation except maybe a period or question mark at the end of each stanza and if this had been done that way, instead of a few scattered here and there, it wouldn't have distracted the reading from me. but because of the other judges comments and because it has been changed before the round was over, i don't think i can really judge this right now and therefore will be scoring this after i hear from Master Ktulu.


    • Master Ktulu silver member
      February 26, 2008
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      You are ok to score this as it appeared prior to the corrections....as if there were no punctuations.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    February 26, 2008
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    Very hot poem, form done well. Nothing to complain about at all! well done team-mate!


    • Corvus Corone
      March 5, 2008
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      I thank you, Cap'n. I ain't that happy with it but maybes that is cos it is auto biographical. I dunno


  • Tattboyspet
    February 25, 2008

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    A wonderful write on something that is ALWAYS personal to somebody in the BDSM lifestyle

    Spelling and grammar = 18 (no punctuation)
    Presentation = 20
    Originality = 20 (using a whip is DEFINITELY original!)
    'grab me' effect = 18 (the use of the vulgarity put me off quite a bit)
    overall = 19
    TOTAL = 95/100


    • Corvus Corone
      February 26, 2008

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      Thank you chantell, you aready know my relationship with punctuation so point taken. As for the use of vugarity I used that to reflect the astute brutality between Myself and the sub and yes it was a two way street in her way she was just as hard on Me as I was on her. It is not only the subs limits that get pushed and I was definitely going places I probably don't want to go again. No regrets. x


  • Sylvyrwyng gold member
    February 25, 2008
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    YEEEEEHHHHHAAAAAAA!!!!! fantastic job! lololol....


  • Master Ktulu silver member
    February 25, 2008

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    Jem;

    I absolutely love this. Your words and descriptions leave me longing for the whip of my Mistress..lol

    Seriously, this is absolutely awesome. You have done a very personal write and made it one to capture your audience. Stunning. However, I think this lacks in one aspect........there is no punctuation (commas or periods)........


    spelling/grammar - 18 (-2 points for punctuation)
    presentation - 20
    originality - 20
    how well you handled challenge - 20
    overall - 20
    _____________________________

    Total -98



    **Master Ktulu**


    • Corvus Corone
      February 25, 2008
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      Point taken on the punctuation as I am crap at that so tend to leave it as I end up putting commas and stops everywhere but where they should be


  • Tarja
    February 25, 2008

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    I don't really understand the author's notes but the poem is fucking brutal. I loved it... very detailed and it's always nice to read a sexy dark piece like this one.


    • Corvus Corone
      February 25, 2008
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      Thank you Fair... and brutal about sums up the relationship that featured here as we were definitely on the extreme SM of BDSM.

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