It's monochromatic here -
I see white walls
and the passing time
reflects off white uniforms
as they pass me by.
White
against night,
one every fifteen minutes -
(starting at two minutes past the hour)
It's as backward as they think I am.
They're in here for their health,
but I'm here because I destroyed mine,
and I proved them wrong -
once,
twice,
three times
(why aren't you out?)
But now it's different -
there's colour here,
at this place they call home,
but the monochrome was welcome
and I'd die to go back
(Oh God, I love the irony,
because life is a mere thought
and I'm a figment of your imagination -
say goodbye to your imaginary friend)
A contest entry
- Life. by Puking Faerie Dust.
1275 points, ended March 12, 2008, 20 entries
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Comments
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This was interesting. I liked how you didn't name names, you just spoke of the people as "them/they". The shortness of it was beneficial too, as was the ending in parentheses. The last line tied everything together neatly and gave a bit of a twist. All in all, pretty great write.
Thank you or entering, and good luck
Jeanette*~

