Music pounds in the background
Of the little hidden room where the DJs live.
The night blue walls, hastily painted,
Bear the name of this place
Like a slate colored seal branded into its skin.
The spray-painted words fade into the darkness...
I squint my eye’s to read them: “The Edge”.
One can smell the musky sent of sweat floating in the air
Left over from small weekend parties held in spontaneity,
Where the music’s beat pounded into the floor
For all the anxious dancers’ feet-
Pulsing like a repetitive electric shock.
Towers of skyscraper speakers
and tangles of highway wires
trample the grey shag carpet,
Reflected in the silver disks that gaze
Like a hundred peering eyes from above.
These CDs glisten on the ceiling like watchful stars-
Completed rainbows aligned in garden straight rows
Nailed to the plain white squares above by some
Time wasted DJ.
Another boredom victim exhibits his art on the white board:
a cartoon penis with a roaring drooling mouth
Next to other attempted comic sketches of genitalia,
No doubt a boy’s masterpiece.
One DJ decorated everything
With little white labels:
The chairs christened “chair”,
The computer dubbed “computer”,
And the clock nicknamed “The Heartless Bitch”.
The old plaid couch must have had a story as well,
With its cheap fluffy padding bursting out of its seams.
Acknowledging its convenient location in the corner,
One wonders how many women have moaned
Beneath the weight of a man over the many years
That dust collected upon its crippled springs.
The dead-eyed drummer sighs... in the stifling, Sunday, silence,
And glances at The Heartless Bitch that never seems to change.
Tapping his chewed number two pencils on the desk
Like a zombie musician playing “Creep” in his mind
Author notes
Based upon The Edge Office at Bradley University.
Revised Feb. 29th... Leap Year!
~Shahrazad
A contest entry
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I really enjoyed the imagery and concepts in this piece. I really think it would be even better if it was broken into stanzas to create the proper pauses for effect. It was a pleasure reading your work.
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AWESOME! I think you captured it pretty completely. The best part was how you captured the feeling one gets when they walk in there of haphazard decorations, boredom, and decay but mixed with music and energy. Nice work!


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Thanks for the comment kate- it's cool because you have actually seen the place I'm describing. glad you thought the portrayal was accurate
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Wow, this is quite a piece of work, my dear daughter !!
You've brought this piece to life with your vivid imagery. I can hear the music playing, see the clandestine quickies on the battered sofa (had to close my eyes, felt like a voyuer)
An excellent piece and I wish you best of luck in the contest
love and
Mamma
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great
great poem, please comment some of mine!
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