My heart beats out for you,
Even though yours doesn't beat so strongly back.
You cannot tie up your own shoe,
But I make up for what you lack.
Lying on your hospital bed,
I remember what happened that fateful night,
In defense for me, I won't forget what you said,
when you got caught up in that fight.
I hope you'll come round for me,
I'm waiting for you know,
All my wishes are for you to see,
I hope you'll be there for when we vow,
Even though you're not whole,
I love you with all of my soul.
Author notes
Written with Catherine, my friend. Written in English since it was Valentine's Day.
Write down what you brain says...
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Someone on the hospital bed richly appreiates a friend who will stay by them. A very sweet poem.
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this is a nice poem but i have already ranked this poem thank you for sharing this with the group
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Sounds like someone stood up for you and they are now in the hospital. Hope that this person soon heals and you can spend more time with them. Easy to read and understand the sentiments expressed so well in these lines.
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This is sweet. Thank you for sharing this with the group.
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Great!
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Really lovely poem for a friend. I also thought this was going to be about a false love between two people because of the second line but then we realize later on that this person is actually in the hospital... A very discreet twist. Thank you for sharing this with the group.
animated
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My heart beats out for you,
Even though yours doesn't beat so strongly back.
At first I thought this was going to be about unrequited
love. then I read on and saw that its much deeper than that. Nice job. -
Sounds like a real champ. I hope they come back around for you. This is perfect for valentine's. Awesome work and collab.
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Nice to work with friends on collaborations to see what can be created. Fit for Valentine's Day. Thanks for sharing.
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this is wonderful full of your love i love you with all my soul thank you for sharing this with the group
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I guess we are always the half that makes another's whole and they in turn somehow make us whole in ways that can never be understood. This write shows beautifully how this can be so. Thank you for sharing with the group.
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Wonderful!!
This is so beautiful!
My heart beats out for you,
Even though yours doesn't beat so strongly back.
You cannot tie up your own shoe,
But I make up for what you lack.
These lines are wonderful.
Good job with this.
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What language would it have been written in if it hadn't been Valentine's Day?
I love the first four lines so much!
"My heart beats out for you,
Even though yours doesn't beat so strongly back.
You cannot tie up your own shoe,
But I make up for what you lack."
Maith tu, as usual.
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awwww this is such a beautiful write and its so strong. your wordding it captuees so much in it and the emotion and scene is amazing well done
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yayy i get to be the first to comment on this
and my comment is : WONDERFUL WORK SIS i lvoe it loads
i wish u the best to write more and more coz u rock
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