Night holds its breath
Wrapped
around sinuous treelimbs
dang-
ling
snakes hang in
brazen lover's
knots
Watching from above
as if i were a conspiratorial spirit
outside my body
Your familiar reflection
from that mirror
more naked than the stars
Summons me again...
A contest entry
- One Poem A Week...A Series/ Week 8 Featuring MuddyKing by poet2angels.
875 points, ended March 5, 2008, 13 entries
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Night holds its breath
Comments
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I'm not the biggest fan when it comes to reading erotica poetry, but this one definately managed to grab my attention.
How graciously you weave these words, using great imagery that way and avoiding cliché alltogether.
You have done a great job with the sensuality here.
thank you for entering - I wish you all the best.
Leander -
What an image this weaves, the dangling tree limb line is excellent. This one I can really get into and the closing is superb.
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A very sensual piece you have composed here.
the images are both lovley and strong without being over powering.
Thank you for entering!
Best of luck to you!
Blessing
Bel
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*shock* The wording and choice of words is one of the best I have ever seen. Top notch job here. Beautiful. Fav lines: snakes hang in brazen lover's knots
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yeah they always seem to do that when i am with a 'new' woman thanks much for all these reads/comments regards zaj
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Beautiful, sensual and I love the form in which this was written...Just so beautiful
Lynda
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much thanks for the read/kind comments regards zaj
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this is a thinker, and I like the use of familiar in the last stanza
my favorite passage
this is sultry and sensual
and leaving one wanton again
what more could you ask for
best wishes
Peace Muddy
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much thanks for the read/comments glad this was of interest regards zaj
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