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Someone, Somewhere

Someone
Someone knows who I am
They see
The things inside of me
Someday
Maybe you'ree see
The things that only
They see in me

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"Someone" doesn't live in Florida

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  • larkbird
    February 25, 2008

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    Not a bad little ramble, that is for sure. It carries the feel of just a little sixth period bored ramble, which is fine in it's place. However, you need to work on line six. I am not sure what you were trying to say there, but I have the feeling that you didn't say it. Is 'You'll' the word that you were looking for, or 'you're'? But that is a really cute little poem. Well done.