En la noche
Con el uno de su amor
Muchachas bonitas
Faldas largas
Las caras pintaron
El pelo rizó agradable
Muchachos guapos
Los cuerpos fuertes
Niza conviene
El olor de calogne
Solo ti y tu amor
Usted baila con el otro
Descubrir su amor
Para el uno al otro
Author notes
I love dance and I love Spanish so I really enjoyed writing this poem. I was really inspired by the meeting the husband through dance so this is partly where I took this from. I'm sorry if this didn't meet the command of the English language please forgive me... I didn't think it would sound as good in English as it did in Spanish... If you remove my poem from the contest I understand
A contest entry
- What is your favorite type of Dance? by BellaD.
450 points, ended March 2, 2008, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I love this!!! It's beautiful, and I agree, the Spanish definitely adds something. The words are beautiful and I love how you put the poem together with images.
"Las caras pintaron
El pelo rizó agradable"
love it!!!!
~QoA
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I love this entry because I not only love dance but the Spanish language as well (my major!). Beautiful imagery and emotion in your poem.
Not to be picky but you have a few grammatical points to revise, mostly to do with keeping singular and plural agreement, such as "las noche" should be "la noche" and "muchachas bonita" needs to be "bonitas" to agree with muchachas.
In line 5, I was just curious if you meant painted faces which I would write as "caras pintadas"
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Thank you so much, I was noticing that too before I got to the comment, like I had said in the message I was writing it really fast and you know how that is. I was sitting in class about to get ready to leave.
~Maria
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