NIGHTFALLING
Dark streets are empty and the fear is high.
Wander through the ghettos under leaden skies.
The Devils footfalls are as soft as a sigh.
The beggars in the alleyways wave goodbye.
Hate is red fire in a demon’s eye.
Murder in the subway when humidity is high.
Neon spells out truth but the truth is a lie.
Hide until daylight if you don’t want to die.
Ambulances screaming through the rampant dark.
Doctors in the theatres play out their parts.
Lawyers in the courtrooms practice dark arts.
Judges speak the sentences; they’re pure in heart.
Policeman hates the Blackman but gives a head start.
Blackman hates the policeman as he runs through the park.
Mr. Normal holds a gun; he’s no longer a mark.
Tinder dry hatred is ignited by a spark.
Neighbour hates his neighbour when the music’s too loud.
Pizza man is knocking, he’s delivering a shroud.
Junkie’s hand on a knife hilt as he slides through the crowds.
He’s looking for a high place so he can take his bow.
In a riot there’s no waiting; no need for money down.
If you want it and you need it you can take it now.
The cash keeps on bleeding from the sacred cow.
Churches pay their dues but they’re not sure how.
A miasma of fear is rising in the streets.
Hate is the love child and the baby aint sweet.
We’re chewing on the hatred and it tastes of poisoned meat.
Candy seller on the corner gives the kids a treat.
They’re escaping from the war zones on bleeding feet.
I pray the advertising man my soul to keep.
Drums from the east make us dance to their beat.
Satan’s in his counting house,he's turning up the heat.
Author notes
Option 2. This was inspired by an old Bob Dylan track I'd been listening to. The track is "Desolation Row" and I think its off the "Blonde on Blonde" album. I often use lyrics for inspiration.
MANINBLACK
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Comments
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An interesting poem with a good flow. The amount of contests and trophies threw me off considering you as a finalist though. Thank you for entering and good luck.
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Wow. This is incredible. That's all I can really say right now. This totally blew me away. Great job.
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Wow; a very dark & beautiful piece. I loved your imagery and such original thoughts in this..
made for an excellent read. Very intruiging.
Thanks for entering & best of luck
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Wow
This write was a gorgously dark and true piece.
I wish I could somehow critique this but I can't find any flaws haha. It's a sad but true write about how the world is today, amazing. I'll definately try to find the time to listen to that song (since it was your inspiration) I'm going to tell you right now this will most likely make finals. Thanks so much for entering and good luck
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THis is really a tragic look on today's society, well done on bringing this darker parge and making it large enough for others to see and to join in for just a moment, best to you
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Good Poem. The flow was good and it made me jump out my seat while i was reading. Thanks for entering my contest i wish you the best of luck.
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Wow, great job, awesome and omG too. good luck in the contest. D
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Amazing rhyme, great flow.
"Neon spells out truth but the truth is a lie."
Deep, dark, beautiful.
Good luck
Though I'd like it better if I knew who you are.
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this is very good
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Congrats on making it into the finalists list, this means i read on further than the first four lines of your poem. Thanks for entering =] xx
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i bow down to the rhyme god... i usually suck at ryhming... you on the other hand wow... well done and i really like your entry too... good luck in the contest
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Love it....the comparison and description of things that are so violent and evil and life are just so creative and shows that innocense it not forever if it's even existant.. great job
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Awesome, very nice write. The flow was impecable. Wordplay was spot on, use of vocabulary, analogy and metaphore in image creation was excellent. Quite enjoyed it thanks.
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You're a clever poet, and work very well with rhyme.
Keep writing, everything I've read of yours is wonderful.
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Thanks
It's comments like yours that make me want to keep writing. Ego is a wonderful muse!
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