Spiritual telepathy's mortal transitions
become obscured corporate visions,
clouded desktop plateau's
of mans secular vanity,
faiths time weathered lost moral renditions,
mundane minds expectations gone astray.
Our spirits don't transcend from human disdain,
nor nourish serenity with blood of wars or violence.
We're not terrestrial prisoners,
materialistic greed is temporal,
but love is it's own entity,
like faith, trust and morals,
it cannot be bought.
Cosmos universal boundaries eternal call,
free from embodied physical restrictions,
far removed from life's worldly confines,
beckons longing hearts
to heavens unlimited dimensions
God's filigree temples throne
of eternities resplendent
golden sunrise
soul.
Author notes
Grammy Awards ~ From Bronze to Gold
My wings to fly away
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It's one poem: 100 words or less.... that incorporates, in some way, your last 3 poems entered.... using a format that you have not used for any of your previous round entries.
Spiritual painted renditions(Corrugated Tears) of times plateau
juxtaposed with clouded desktops(personification of day planner) mans corporate secular vanities, mundane minds gone astray and faiths time weathered( Weathered Jeans)and morals can't be bought.
Last stanza follows (corrugated Tears) dimensions of the heart and soul removed from mortal false boundaries and boxed restrictions and answering souls beckoning call.
In a list
A contest entry
- 'And why the sea is boiling hot--And whether pigs have wings.' by HeavenScent4U.
1750 points, ended April 8, 2008, 4 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Grammy Awards ~ From Bronze to Gold by Rebekah-Ann.
300 points, ended May 2, 2008, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I can see the three different emotions that flow into one in this write, War, Love, Hope... This was planned very well and magnificently crafted.
Thank you for your very lovely entry and all the best in this contest and any onthers you might try.
All the best
Becks -
I really liked this, you put a lot of heart and knowledge and perception into this piece and have managed to tie all of your poems together into a neat bundle here. I liked the alliteration throughout this but it is lacking something and I don't know what. Please don't think that it means you haven't done a wonderful job because you have indeed, I just feel it may be missing a little something.
SCORE:
Rules: 10
Presentation: 9
Spelling, grammar, and punctuation: 20
Originality: 19
How well you handled the prompt: 20
Overall: 18
Total: 96 -
This has power.
And it even looks well centered.
I wish you well.
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Hey there Wolf ~
Nice job here.....as a Judge, I would say it was lacking in the Power department.....but as a Poet I have to say great write......lots to see within your words......you had me from the very beginning ~
Your 3rd stanza really rocks.....I wish you the best in the contest,
Bear ~
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What a great piece, it never felt as if this piece was more than one joined together, shows amazing thought processes in this piece, wishing you the best of luck in the contest hun
Karen
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