Gentle tide rolls waves
hushing sound;
breaths release to undertow
and peace settles.
Author notes
10 poets
13 words
15 minutes
Prompt:
"Fake feelings of security
drowning
in an incessant spiral of melancholy"
- Chantell [Tattboyspet]
From her poem Hurting
A contest entry
- 10X13X15 Lets go by Exodus.
450 points, ended February 25, 2008, 5 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Good write, yes that undertow has taken many a life. Good job of bringing this out in such a short piece. Thanks for sharing and congrats on the bronze.
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ckwriter69
Thank you.
~Pamela 
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Congrats on the bronze ... a truly different take on the prompt, but I got the feeling of accepting the inevitable here with peace and tranquility
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I can hear the ocean in this one.
Very maternal tones. Loved it!
Blue
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Blue
Thank you so much. ~Pamela
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I agree with Friday - it's a softie
Makes me want to cuddle on it
Congrats
Never ♥
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Never
Thank you so much.
So pleased you enjoyed this one. Congrats on your silver. A great contest. ~Pamela 
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Beautiful take on the prompt.
There's a softness to this that the other pieces I've read don't have.
Thank you
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Friday
Thank you so much for your wonderful comment and the honor of bronze in your contest. I am thrilled. ~Pamela
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Hold my head under.
Lovely work.
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Mark
Thank you so much for your wonderful comment and congrats on the gold. Well done. ~Pamela
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Choices selection of words. Good Luck.
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spiritualangel
Thank you so much. ~Pamela
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