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Painful




Wandering thoughts,
packed in feelings …
secured in absences
not to feel, so painful !





















Author notes

Prompt: "Fake feelings of security
drowning
in an incessant spiral of melancholy"

- Chantell [Tattboyspet] From her poem Hurting

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  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    February 25, 2008

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    Oh my. You took this to a totally different place. I liked this. ~Pamela


  • Exodus gold member
    February 25, 2008

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    I think the last line could have had more impact. It seemed to let the rest of the poem down. Other than that line this was a great write. Thank you


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    February 25, 2008
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    Good take!


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    February 25, 2008
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    Good luck.