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Why won't you believe me?!

For a change in scenery

[from the back of my mother's head]

whilst driving down the road

in a old abandoned meadow

with woods on each side

I chanced a look outside my window.

To my mother I yelled:

 

Look.
See it?
Its a unicorn.
Yup.
No, really! I swear!
Mom, don't laugh at me.
[she never believes me]

first it was the leprechauns.

[they were in the vegetable garden]
next the griffins.

[it landed on my bloody tree-house!!]
she didn't even believe me when
the dragon smashed the rosebush.
[my sled was the one to blame]

So I tried again

telling her that I really did see

the unicorn.

so beautiful.

it was majestic!

And my mother still did not believe me.

 

Fine.

Have it your way, mom.

Don't believe me.

But when the bunyips and

chupacabras attack.

[which I'm sure they will.]

I won't believe you.

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  • infernalxfidelity
    March 4, 2008
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    ...this was crazy. i loved it. i liked the style and everything. good job.

    good luck!

    ~S-H-O


  • tarcus
    March 2, 2008
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    ARE WE OF THE SAME FAMILY?


    • SpiceRack
      March 3, 2008
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      BLAH! We should be :] Especially if you think like I do, according to my mother, that's very rare haha :]


  • Metaphorist
    February 26, 2008

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    "Chupacabras"! Haha. Haven't heard that one in a while. I think this tells more about the relationship between parents and their children that isn't said. Enjoyed it!


  • righteousme
    February 26, 2008

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    IMAGINITIVE

    i loved it personally. i think the end when you say "i wont believe you" you are conveying the feeling of being rejected. good read.good write.


  • Born Insane 650
    February 25, 2008
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    this poem is well tought out
    and like perception said it was pretty funny


  • Perception
    February 25, 2008
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    hehehe... That is pretty funny, but it would have been funnier with a surprise ending where the mother gets eaten by a rather large rat or something. Yah know

    ~Nice write...


  • g-tonttu
    February 25, 2008

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    Fun,
    I like the use of mythological creatures...Curse those who are "to adult" to believe, sad are they.

    Oh,
    and remember to check under the bed every night... ;D
    G

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