Little boy little boy,
When will you open your eyes,
And see what is in front of you?
Can you see that girl standing in front of you?
No probably not,
Because your just a little boy, still.
And she is no girl, but a woman.
When will you learn to grow up little boy?
When will you learn your life is no longer fun and games?
When will you see that you have kids to take care of?
Why can't you see this?
Why can't you just grow up?
Be a man little boy,
Because you can't go on like this.
You'll be in over your head sooner then you think.
Maybe this is what you need, in order to wake up,
To grow up.
Little boy man up!
Author notes
my friend is going to be having a baby soon and the father is a friend too but he is goin out and partying and most likely messin w/ other girls...
while he all ready has one kid n now this one on the way. I feel like he is still liveing in the past n needs to man up n become a hard working dad for his kids.
though i know my friends are good people, only one is showing that they care. she puts up with his shit way too much, and i hope one day she can leave him, but she is more of a woman then he is a man.
i love them both but that boy needs to grow up.
just to inform some on this poem i recently got something in the mail from another site that they want to put this in a book!!!
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i feel like i have done something right by writing this, and it makes me want to keep writing.
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wat ya think? need some work?
Comments
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I liked it
I thought Its great.
And I loved the end line.
Awesome, great. Thanks
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Very Nice
Hello there and thanks for entering the contest i thought your piece was really good and a very good read too.Me and My wife just had miscarriage so reading this was really beauitful...
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So true, i love it.. there are so many lil boys in this world who just need to man up! Thank you for entering and good luck!
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This was really powerful... and even spoke to me about a person in my life/ should be in my life. You didn't use a lot of imagery and metaphor but I felt that you didn't need it in this poem- the emotions spoke on it's own. Good work!
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Thanks so much, I feel like this poem is my best one and it is my favorite.
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hmmm i know what its like to watch only one parent give a sh**. my sis is in a similar predicament. ty for this piece.
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ur welcome
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