I can see us there together
just like it was yesterday
finally it was just you and me
the rest of the world went away
I was holding you so close
that I could feel your beating heart
and for that one moment in time
nothing in the world could tear us apart
Our bodies so close together
feeling your soft skin against mine
never ever wanting to let go
knowing there's never enough time
Loving you with all I have
God would say it's a sin
but baby, if I had the chance
I'd do it all over again
Please tell me what you think
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short and to the piont.
good rythim flowynes x -
Very short and sweet. It was a very good poem over all, with very good flow, and the rhymes were very well placed... But, I think more description would help out a bit...
but it is a wonderful poem
Great job
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this is simple,but cute.it has a good flow to it.
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Beautiful!
Nice flow and vivid imagery. I feel the same way about my man. I'm going to print this to show him what I'd say if I could. A lovely and nicely written devotion.
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Awww, this is sweet and touching. I don't see why it would be a sin to love like this. Thanks for sharing!
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A very tender poem. I like the first and third part especially. The number of vowels doesn't always match, which kind of breaks the flow, but that's peanuts.
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