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Growing Pains

Mother' tears.
Fathers embrace.
It's time for me to go.

Hesitant steps.
Untried wings.
The strength of my heart I don't know.

Learning to soar,
fearing to fall.
Just how high should I fly?

Broken wings.
Shattered soul.
How many tears can I cry?

Left alone.
Trying to hide.
Please? Make the hurting end.

Mother's tears.
Father's embrace.
The wounds begin to mend.

Stronger steps.
Tested wings.
My thoughts return to the sky.

Learning to fall.
Starting to rise.
Teaching myself to try.

Hold my head high.
Face down my fears.
Slowly I start to grow.

Starting anew.
Careful but sure.
The strength of my heart?



                                      Now I know.




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"Why do we fall? So we can learn to pick ourselves up."

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  • grannyeri gold member
    February 28, 2008

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    LIked the brevity of the lines, the flow and the rhythm and rhyme of the poem. Strong message shared through these words as well. We learn from our mistakes, from our falls, and hopefully will not make them again. Until we are out on our own, making our own decisions and being responsible for the consequences, we will not reach adulthood and the thinking processes that need to occur at that time. Sentiments well expressed in these lines.


  • Perception
    February 27, 2008

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    Hmmm... This is very interesting. I like how you wrote it... It really gave it a nice feel, I'm not sure if I (personally that is) liked the format... I feel as if it didn't have enough description... But, I know that's not what you are going for.

    You got across the message -- wonderful job, by the way... I loved the rhyme scheme though.. it was very good -- and made the poem have wonderful flow.

    Great job... There is nothing I could suggest ~ great poem


  • sewasham gold member
    February 26, 2008

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    Very nice. This flows very well and I enjoyed the rhyme scheme. The message in this is something I think many will identify with. Good work. Take care and Have fun. Steve


  • David J Martin gold member
    February 26, 2008

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    Excellent

    A very valid point (much needed on AP) you have made, in such a /wonderful/ way! I love the short, direct lines. They flow beautifully, and the rhyme works well too! The ending (and format) is just fantastic. I enjoyed every word.

    Nothing pale about your work whatsoever! I'm sure many would agree. It's a pleasure to read.

    And I'm so glad you're a rhymer

    Take care,

    David. x