Out of my mind, I can’t figure her out.
Her ways so sweet, you can’t help but love her.
Minor are the fights; the flaws are minor.
Younger is she, but I love them younger.
Sweet Amera! A precious gift so sweet.
Waves of her love, hugs shores in tidal waves.
Engraves her name on your heart, love engraves.
Enrage I am, when she is set in rage!
To screw with her, is screwing with me too.
Art is her game, her writing perfect art.
Marks placed high, she always hits those marks.
Embark on her style, will passion embark?
Race to be her friend, she makes my heart race.
Ace in the whole, she is my true Queen Ace!
Author notes
A shadow sonnet;
first word and last word of each line is the same
done in 9 or 10 syllables, 14 lines broken normally (key word normally) into 3 stanzas of 4 lines ending in a couplet. Rhyme scheme varies. In this one I added an Acrostic for just to challenge myself some.
Acrostic: Oh My Sweet Amera
rhyme scheme: abbb cddd efff gg
This is to Mistress Passions Princess, Amera, I love you honey.
A contest entry
- Friendship Between Women by SeptemberFaith.
650 points, ended March 4, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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wow! this form of poetry seems so hard to pull off!! i like the poem especially how each line flows.
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I am not sure I completely dig this form. I'm not really a form person anyway, but this just didnt seem to flow for me.. and the line "Younger is she, but I love them younger.".. that made me cringe. It just doesnt seem right.. maybe.. its my life that has made me think that way.. but it just sounded.. bad to me...
anyhow... thank you for your entry.
Criss
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wow
this is amazing..an acrostic within the sonnet..wow..just blew me away..I have read Amera's poems..she is a very talented writer..thanx so much for sharing and best of luck in the contest..hugs a bunch and namaste..
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beautifully done and the shadow sonnet's impossibly difficult but you pulled it off well... the acrostic is good too
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beutifully done,
love is a topic thats been done already so its hard to impress with it, but here i think you were quite fresh, -
A truly difficult form, but one you have done quite well....lovely acrostic as well! This is just something that you rarely, if ever, see...BRAVO!!!
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nice poetry.......can feel the emotions and passion...u write well
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Nice one, although I think the acrostic shape affected the sonnet form, but be it for good or for bad, it didn't affect the feeling.
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a kind tribute to your friend and companion, with kind description of the character she has. well done.
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I should point out here that I totally hate you!!!
I spent a whole damn day writing a shadow sonnet, which I thought wasn't bad, then you go and add a bloody acrostic!
Too good, far far far too good.
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Thats why I am me
I love being hated...hmm, lets see, maybe another challenge is in order my dear
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Always
Passions
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Beautifully Weaved Victorious!
She is such a wonderful soul, I call her teach.. For she has shared many fine masterpieces here with us all to be able to learn more. A lovely dedication indeed hun. Thanks for sharing here.
Much love and light, Timothy
aka poeticweaver~ xo
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Thank you hun, I enjoy going beyond the *form* lol. Glad you enjoyed it.
Love you
Passions
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I really love the tribute. I like how you write two different forms in one. You have become a gifted poet.
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Thanks so much my dear poet. I appreciate your kind words.
Much love
passions
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Very well done acrostic. I agree with other comments, you do have an amazing talent. Keep up the good work and I look forward to reading more.
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That was truely outstanding!!!!
What a way you have with words.. this was so beautiful... and you absolutely nailed the shadow sonnet here.. I can't even imagine trying this and pulling it off with such style as you have!
Amazing.. I'm sure she loved it!!!
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*bows* thank you M'lady for your kind words glad you enjoyed it.
Passions
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lovely
This poem is absolutely fantastic-I loved the form of the poem- very interesting indeed-the rhyming so perfect-the contents so touching- in one word lovely!-all of it
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this is a truly beautiful write mommy you always write with such a heart of gold your words always pure with deep love. love you mommy
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Beautifully done sweetheart. You have outdone yourself once again my love. Wonderfully composed. I Love you baby...Scott
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love this poem
this poem had great thought and passion i thought
i liked the acrostic and the way that each lined began and ended with the same word
good job, you must have been writing for a while(it seams) nice. thanks for the read
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Wow. This is impressive. The acrostic is a fantastic touch on a shadow sonnet! I especially love the subject matter. You have hit a homerun here.
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I love the subject matter as well
yea i said it..lol...Thanks for your loving words as always.
Love
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OMG! My dear sweet mistress! I believe you are the first poet to ever compose an acrostic Shadow Sonnet. The first thing that attracted me to you is your amazing poetic talent. This poem proves it, then, on top of that you dedicated it to me. I am so flattered. This is beautiful and I am putting it in My Shadow Sonnet list and my Treasure Room. Thank you so much, I love you.
Love,
Amera♥
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My Dearest Amera,
Am so very glad you enjoyed it. I love you as well hugs and kisses..
Mistress Passions
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