A little breeze was born
rippled the grass and the quiet water.
A little breeze was born
midst the tufted green and the silent blue.
A little breeze was born
sought the rounded pebble, the broken stone.
A little breeze was born
touched the sticky thistle, the new born sprout,
tumbled down the bank, paused, watching the quiet water,
scurried up the side, stopped again to see the silent blue,
hurried across the drying pebble and the broken stone.
A little breeze was born,
looked around to see what life was all about.
Higher now the breeze explored,
up over the boulder, down to the rotten log.
Wider now the breeze explored,
out across the sand, in and through the twisted vines.
Farther now the breeze explored;
along the top of a distant ridge, behind the rising hill.
Deeper now, there, the forest, dark, too dark-
hurry back-a drop of rain-around the fearful hill-
faster now, over the ridge-dusty sand-twisted vines,
finally, around the boulder and the rotted log.
Safely now the breeze returned to the quiet water and looked about;
the tufted green, the silent blue, pebble and stone, thistle and sprout.
The breeze gathered itself and became a gust,
now firm-now gentle-and with others joined.
Over the ridge, easy now, into the forest with a youthful lust,
determined up the graybrown wood
fiercely trembling a berry vine
softly now, not understood
released again-freedom-a taste of wine.
Hide and seek, together again and then alone-
a breeze no more, not yet a wind, alone.
The gust chuckled to itself and the world, then laughed out loud;
went joyfully through the days ruffling flower and meadow, running proud,
teasing the dandelion-bending the willow, rushing up the tree, high, very high-
-so high now-above the tree a wisp of white-very small-moved across the sky.
Down to an orchard, blossoms fragrant and fresh-whispering through
branches wet with morning-glistening in welcome, flowered, open to
the sun searches and turns, beckoning warmth within; an answer now
a question, restless gust flutters the blossom pure, soon a blossom
not, the gust ceases to be a gust.
The new wind left, as all new winds must…
up and above the forest, once dark, once vast, no longer so.
Out and across the plain, rising whorls of dust,
pushing smaller waves across a larger lake, molding a drift of snow
along a mountain range, finding soon enough that very little is
strange.
The new wind searched, as all new winds must,
no cloud too high, no ocean too vast, everything to see-everywhere
to go.
A full wind now, complete and knowing,
restless search goes on; proud musky pine along an oft seen ridge.
Tall fierce unbending pine and fir, beneath the full wind blowing.
Jumbled rock and broken hill, barren land, no small tree on this
swept ridge.
A full wind now, complete and knowing, continues its restless
blowing.
A full wind now, complete and knowing,
restless search goes on; graceful elm, shady maple in the fertile
valley.
Safe and inviting maple and elm, shaped and caressed by the full
wind blowing.
Quiet lazy river, gently rolling hill, a place to rest only, this
fertile valley.
A full wind now, complete and knowing, continues its restless
blowing.
A full wind now, complete and knowing
restless search goes on; fragile poplar, forgiving willow along the
side.
Tauntingly prim poplar, ever bending willow, broken and left, full
wind blowing.
Fast growing poplar, strangling willow bough, no stopping here,
full wind blowing.
A full wind now, complete and knowing, continues its restless
blowing.
A full wind now, complete and knowing, restless search goes on;
once again the tall proud pine, the barren ridge, buffeted and
blustery yet unbroken, no answer here, the full wind blowing.
Restless search goes on; once again the taunting poplar along the
side, broken again, part of an answer-the lusty breeze-once more
the full wind blowing.
A full wind now, complete and knowing,
with storm and fury, with anger and wrath.
Faced the full wind, complete and knowing.
Lulled the storm and fury, quieted the anger and wrath.
Soothed the restless spirit; then from knowledge without knowing,
spoke:
Long have I waited, long have I been...
to you I am known as the Oak.
Author notes
Actually, this is a pre write, a very, very old one at that. I was posted here once upon a time, but is now on SW. Don't know if this will work, we shall see...
A contest entry
- Sapphire's Saga by Sensual Sapphire.
3530 points, ended April 3, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Exquisite
This spoke very deeply to the native within. The desciptions reminded me of sights seen on horseback.
While we yet follow the wind to places a horse could not reach, one feels the progression of the wind's journey.
With the fullfillment of a purpose and the silent passing of time, a tree grows...and becomes.
A very moving and effective piece you have written here.
Glad to have found it.

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Oh. This is a nice little poem that you have penned in here. I love how it's this wonderous story of a wind born and the passage of it's life. Which could be a metaphor for any creatures life. You did such a good job with this and the images were really great. The only thing I might suggest is that you remove some of the repetition of the wind lines. They kind of got distracting because there were so many of them. Just a thought.
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Aren't we all searching for that Oak? I like this one as it is playfully cute with great personification. It reminds me of the craziness of my youth and the time spent searching for that person that grounded me. Usually I don't like long poems, but I needed to see where it was going. I think that the repetition got to be a little too much for me towards the end so I skipped ahead and then read back. I do have to say that the ending did not disappoint.
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Very nicely done almost like a fairy tale with an adult ending. Good write I enjoyed reading the piece. Happy trails
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This may well meet the contests request for some depth and length but surely the content is stretched too far. Clever use of repetition but, in the end, over-extended and, therefore, tiring imagery.
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Very long winded, for me. I don't understand how the whole poem was about wind - until the final line. Some great parts, but for me there was too much repetition, eg /a full wind now, complete and knowing/ was repeated nine times and that was a bit too often. For me. And oak was only mentioned once, apart from the title, whereas willow, poplar, pine etc got a better share.
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