Forever Never.
you stare at the ceiling
wondering day by day
what is your purpose?
you really are
just wasting your life away
your life
your dreams
your aspirations
too far out of reach
your life
your energy
draining slowly
by a leech
you want to runaway
you want to say goodbye
for all the truth you know
has only become a part of the lie
silence lingers in the air
telling the story of the broken
who no longer does care
goodbye you
want to say
but lost you are
never to know
which way
your hear screams to let go
your holding on by a string
never wanting anyone to know.
you cry in the dark
with the light of the blue
forevernever knowing
what to do
Please tell me what you think
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Thiswas amazing
This was so original and a great theme, I truely loved this and had felt this way before, I loved the seventh and eigth stanzas and the original word forevernever. Brilliant my friend. Many blessings to you.
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Awesome!
I think this writing is very touching. I like flow of it, the melancholy, the deep sadness. The point of view; the one, who's discribing an other's conditions - it's like the teller explain the readers situation; really good way to put it
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catchy and clever title
it's inspiring in itself.
this sounds like the pit of depression to me. being so far down you can no longer see or even imagine hope.
having each line start with a capital letter was kinda distracting for me. they seem to take power away from your words. just my opinion of course
solid write
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