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[ Fall into the ebony bleakness of the our universe ]

Fall into the ebony bleakness of the our universe

Pouring over with emotions and tears

Take no heed or fear, this is.... 

 

Screaming makes no noise

Just a small ripple

That fades into nothing

 

Tell a story, a story to comfort

Comfort is needed in this world

No faith, hope or dreams

 

Fears invade and warp around my eyes

Shadows turn into dark clowns

Their white smiles never fading

 

Emotions are worn naked on our skin

There is nothing hidden from our human eyes

Only what is already done

 

Pasts are repeated and repeated

Knowledging but not knowledge

Let is be our doom as humans

 

Nothing being something

Nonexisting being existing

All in all is truly our fate and fault

 

No one it waiting at the end of the tunnel

No savior, no god, no one but ourselves

Caring for others is our demise

 

Take no heed and turn our backs

Let shadows be our light

And night rule over day 

 

Take no heed

And let darkness be our guide

Then can we truly exist and never be forgotten

 

Fall into the ebony bleakness of our universe

Pouring over with emotions and tears 

Take no heed or fear, this is...

 

                                                         OUR END! 

Author notes

go with the flow... favorite musical is most likely Phantom of the Opera

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  • Little Lottie
    April 5, 2008
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    I loved this. I loved the contradictions you put in there. Nothing being something... I really do love this one. You summed up our world in just a few stanzas from a realist's point of view--which is something I love. It makes sense and makes the reader think, which is also something I love. Very well put together. Good job and good luck!


  • corrupt angel
    April 2, 2008

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    I loved this. So full of imagery and emotion.

    "No one it waiting at the end of the tunnel
    No savior, no god, no one but ourselves
    Caring for others is our demise"

    My favorite stanza. Great write, and thanks for entering.


  • Star of Atlantis
    March 25, 2008

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    Screaming makes no noise

    Just a small ripple

    That fades into nothing


    love this as per it reminds me of a song i have written called silent screams. funny that we both think of screaming as silence. i like the way you put it though per haps better than silent screams, as this could be taken in a backwards way where yours can not. i dont usually post my music but perhaps i should... as a matter of fact my entry for this contest will be my first song to be posted on here... little nervouse about that. as i think songs need to be sung and poetry just read... bit different but when you have a creative brain child you have to push it out into the world and see how it grows up all on its own. so now i abandon it to the readers of this page and we shall see where it goes... who knows... but i hope it takes each reader on their own discoveries just as your poem has done here for me ... good luck in the compititon


  • Charley-
    March 24, 2008

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    Hello there and thanks for entering the contest i thought your piece was really good and a very good read too.Thanks again for entering and best of luck


  • Mow
    March 20, 2008

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    I love the explanation that we cannot help others but only ourselves...its so true because if we help others... they wont help themselves....so we're not helping....existance is fatal .... love it


  • Redrusty66
    March 19, 2008

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    Excellent imagery and imaginative analogies. Great flow and scheme. I was enamoured with the images it allowed my own perspective to ponder. Kept my attention. Great write was a pleasure to read.


  • Ryno
    March 5, 2008
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    This is well done The ending was very interesting, but caught my attention.

    I think the imagery was too bulky and descriptive and it did more tell then seeing. It didn't allow me to feel as much... thats all.

    Liked the intensifying aspect of this. Sickly wicked

    Ryan


  • DestiniesTwined
    February 24, 2008

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    This is really good. It expresses alot of emotions and thoughts. The eighth stanza is my favorite. Keep writing.

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