I want to tell you what I feel
But I don't know where to start.
I don't have any sisters, but I think of you as one
Knowing that your leaving is like losing a piece of my heart.
You don't understand...
I've tried to say the words,
But you just brushed aside my feelings
Making light of this difficult life change.
Maybe you did that because it's hard for you too.
Six hours isn't far
I know this in my head
But whose house will I come to when I'm crying?
Whose shoulder will I hug when I feel like I'm dying?
Who will hear all my secrets, fears, pain, joy?
Who will tell me it'll all be okay and give me the advice you so skillfully dispense?
Life has seen fit to take us through so much...
Broken hearts, long nights, bad jobs, bad boyfriends, bad cars,
And wonderful marriages...
You've seen me through the hardest times
And made me laugh in the best of times...
And now you're going away.
If I don't speak...
It's because I can't.
Each time I start I feel the hot tears slice my eyes like butter
And that lump rises in my throat like the fears in my heart.
I don't make friends easily, especially not one as close as you.
To say I'll miss you is incomplete
I know you can't stay and it's time to say goodbye
But your absence is a bitter pill I can't seem to take.
Now it's reality and you're leaving.
But I only wish you could stay.
Author notes
4) "Stay" is a charming word in a friend's vocabulary.
A contest entry
- Friendship Between Women by SeptemberFaith.
650 points, ended March 4, 2008, 13 entries
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I liked this poem a lot, it was really emotional too. I can relate to this because one of my best friends of 7 years moved last summer. We may be 14 hours away and in different states, but we still keep in touch. It is alway hard when a good friend moves. I liked your final line.
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Awww, wow I really like this. The emotions you are conveying shine through amazingly..I feel like I can relate to it..and it really makes me think. I love the ending..great job!
Oh, and thanks so much for the helpful comment on my poem
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"Making light of this difficult life change." This line doesnt go, it would mean that they were enhancing the situation, but it sounds like its being pushed aside as one of lifes changes....
..but I only wish you could stay... those are the most beautiful words.
Cris -
Excellent
As I read your piece I could feel the pain for I know what it is to have someone move from my life. The emotions expressed in this work shine through like a light through a window. I liked it very much.
Take care and God Bless,
Michael
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Excellent--Well written & Versed--
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Very emotional piece here, and I thank you for sharing. You did a great job, and just keep your head up. My best friend lives 3000 miles away, but no one comes close to the place she holds in my heart.
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mine is moving too
or was.
but she would be 16 hours away
not 6.
and at first it was the end of the world.
but now its not.
because i am the one moving now
for college.
and she has been my sister,
since i dont have any siblings.
so i understand.
but she will miss you too.
i am sure.
keep in touch with her.
and forever close you'll stay. -
yeah this poem really packs a punch, especially when your going through something like that too...as I am
very well written and emotional...but that goes without saying.
good luck without your friend. and in the contest too
creatress
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I really like this one.... Its very emotionally felt. I thought it was very sad... And it is really hard... when your best friend moves away, most of all a neighbor. My best friend moved away a year ago, and my neighbor a few years back... Both times... It was... a good friend leaving me... So I can really feel your pain... i really like this poem... Your descriptions are very well done.. And the flow amazing...
"Whose shoulder will I hug when I feel like I'm dying inside?" would flow better if you just got rid of all extra syllables to: "Whose shoulder will I hug when I am dying?" same affect... better flow.
Wonderful job.... I really... felt this poem... wonderful job
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Well, damn it all, this made me cry. If there was any doubt in my mind that you and I will always be friends, this parting would be so much more difficult. But I know that our bond will not be broken by the distance that will soon be placed between us. And, let me say, if I seem to be taking this lightly...it's just a defense mechanism. You know me. I love you and value your friendship and the thought of our separation is excruciating, but I know that the best place to be is where God wants me. Who am I to say no to Him? One of the reasons I love you so much is because I know you will always support me, even when it sucks...thanks for that. You are truly my best friend.
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