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Fire and Ice

Cozy burning and feverish combustion
Your flames consume my geography
Our ground dancing in the tremor
Both captains of carnal choreography
Throughout this blazing biography

At times we blow the arctic freeze
My breath borrowed by bitter cold
The death of communication colorlessly crisp
Waits for blossoming spring to unfold

Frostbitten fingers numb to the touch
Bathe me in torturous hot steam
For together we become a brilliant jewel
Making true the magic of the dream
Forged from temperatures extreme


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written by RunningFree

I wrote this for the year long journey that the love of my life and I have been on. About a year ago, we were both ready to walk out the door. We knew we wanted to work things out between us but didn't know how.

Fire and ice stood out to me as a title because that is what it has been like for the two of us over this past year. Now we are settled down and don't go to such extremes, but I'm glad we made it through the fire and ice.

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  • ecrivain01 gold member
    March 8, 2008
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    Well ...

    congrats on working through the problems.


  • CitrineSunrise silver member
    March 8, 2008

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    This is a well written poem with a consistent metaphor. Even in the best relationship the tempers and emotions run hot and cold. I'm glad you are more settled and that you were able to voice your turmoil in this verse. Thank you for your entry. Peace, Liz


  • sunny day
    March 8, 2008

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    Your love has taken you on a journey that many have to make and the strength of your bond has held you together. This is filled with vivid imagery, solid emotions and elegant verbiage. It flowed effortlessly and I can't even choose a favorite line or stanza here as they were all most excellent. Kudos for a fantastic use of the title. Thank you for your entry and best of luck in the contest. Joyce


  • michellemybelle gold member
    February 27, 2008
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    Great imagery and tension between fire and ice. Life is like this, as are long lasting relationships, nice to hear you have found the calm after the storm, or perhaps, the gentle warmth of mature deep love.
    Beautifully written.
    blessings,
    Michelle


  • HeavensDaughter
    February 26, 2008

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    Awesome picture of the highs and lows in a relationship and the strength and courage to work through them all!

    Wonderful imagery. My favorite:

    "For together we become a brilliant jewel
    Making true the magic of the dream
    Forged from temperatures extreme"

    What a beautiful jewel a relationship can become when the two are committed to make it really work! And relationships...good ones...ARE WORK!

    Bravo! On both the poem and the relationship. I know that, if you two had NOT chosen to work through the "fire and ice", I would not be blessed with such a wonderful DIL to be!


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    February 25, 2008

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    Congratulations on having the foresight to work things out when it might have been easier to walk out the door. A wonderful poem to mark that moment of victory, for having made the choice. Well done. ~Pamela

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