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Bring me down, my lord

Love me sweet loneliness, love me
be with me forever and ever and hurt me
pain in my mind is only a sign
Close my eyes bitter love, let me sleep
don't ever go away here you have to stay
eyes shut forever with you
Give me breath my lord, I bleed through you
I'm just a puppet played by your hands
please don't let it be gone

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  • grannyeri gold member
    February 28, 2008

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    GIve me my breateh LOrd - thought that was a lovely line. Enjoyed this poem you wrote here - keepw writing.

    • Latradi
      March 1, 2008
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      Thank you for taking the time to read my piece and comment on it.. Lovely words.
      Take care,
      Latadi


  • Kelli Marie
    February 24, 2008

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    I enjoyed this read very much. I think you did a great job. I liked 'love me sweet loneliness' nice work.
    Kelli

    • Latradi
      February 24, 2008
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      Thank you... I was listening to a song about break ups and somehow that's what I got..